07-25-2012, 06:44 PM
(07-22-2012, 07:01 AM)penguin Wrote: Shrinks him with notebook and pencil
stuck in the throat of her table.
A flower suspended;
plucking at petals <-- Bit of a cliched verb/noun combination.
leaves only its Latin label.
Sex and Death, we guess.
She shakes her head,
hand forming
illegible scribble.
Don't like the final two lines (which I see you also say you're not crazy about) for two reasons. 1) It's not really the hand forming the "scribble". 2) As above re: plucking/petals.