07-25-2012, 11:51 AM
bronte-
your comments confirmed what i feared--the poem still is not going in the direction I want it to, rather keeping a feeling of reported events and lists. I think the latest edit is getting at least a step closer to what the piece is about
-an
thanks for the picture; it really was great! though the poem has one in a slightly different direction, I still wanted to incorporate that sense of longing from the image and what I had initially conceived. I hope I can still accomplish that
-billy and addy
thanks for the patience and repeated visits; i apologize for continuously changing the poem's form and content, at the sacrifice of images that I liked and was pleased you could enjoy as well. the poem has a detached quality to it and some pieces that did not fit well together, as noted. I hope to be making improvements in both of those regards. again, I really appreciate your help!
your comments confirmed what i feared--the poem still is not going in the direction I want it to, rather keeping a feeling of reported events and lists. I think the latest edit is getting at least a step closer to what the piece is about
-an
thanks for the picture; it really was great! though the poem has one in a slightly different direction, I still wanted to incorporate that sense of longing from the image and what I had initially conceived. I hope I can still accomplish that
-billy and addy
thanks for the patience and repeated visits; i apologize for continuously changing the poem's form and content, at the sacrifice of images that I liked and was pleased you could enjoy as well. the poem has a detached quality to it and some pieces that did not fit well together, as noted. I hope to be making improvements in both of those regards. again, I really appreciate your help!
Written only for you to consider.