07-25-2012, 11:45 AM
hey ray
haven't really seen other responses, so with that in mind
haven't really seen other responses, so with that in mind
(07-22-2012, 07:01 AM)penguin Wrote: Shrinks him with notebook and pencil ...does the title lead into this? does the /s/ need to be capitalized? I like the idea of "charades" "shrinking" a person if it's the subject.short poems become cryptic pretty easily, and this one, while worded wonderfully, is not really an exception. there are far more questions than answers for me
stuck in the throat of her table.
A flower suspended;
plucking at petals
leaves only its Latin label. ...i'm trying to place the scene. at first, i'm seeing inside an office (what with "shrink" and the analysis going on), but the flower and label place me more on a porch or somewhere outside. or perhaps it's an hourglass of sorts? (plucking at petals--sand for time for a game--e.g., a person's turn is almost over. the "latin label" makes that difficult though). could always just be an inkblot...
Sex and Death, we guess. ...great in the context of the game and psychiatry
She shakes her head,
hand forming
illegible scribble...a nice sense of judgement is imparted in these lines, while perhaps also corresponding to the game (recording answers perhaps? i might be combining too many (board) games
Written only for you to consider.

