A Death in rural China…..Population 1,349,048,905

[tectak]

Capitalize rural maybe?

I'm in a rush, will say something more helpful later, but just wanted to say I found this more moving this read round then I did before, I really love this piece.

Thanks for the glance, univ,
Look forward to your input.. I hope this is ready for bed, but time will tell.No to Rural, though!
Best,
tectak

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It's pretty good, I like the 1st and 3rd verses very much. The 2nd verse is weakest, I think
.dog-barked in to the brightening day - doesn't sound right somehow.
Not keen on full and fulfilled. Why do you capitalise Glint?

He penguin,
I guess I was a bit too clever (or not clever enough!) with the play on full and fulfilled. Glint corrected immediately. Got under the radar.
Best,
tectak