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07-21-2011, 01:57 AM
Every. Time.
I think I've cleansed myself I find out just how dirty I really am.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
07-21-2011, 04:43 AM
Aish, not ignoring this, just momentarily bothered by how close it cuts... I will absorb it properly when I'm fully awake.
It could be worse
07-21-2011, 08:05 AM
you're a really bad girl.
sometimes no amount of scrubbing can make us feel clean. this works on so many levels and with so few words.
07-21-2011, 09:58 AM
No rush, Leanne. Seriously.
Billy, thank you, as usual  To both of you, I am very happy to have found a poetic home here.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
07-21-2011, 12:38 PM
(07-21-2011, 08:05 AM)billy Wrote: you're a really bad girl. It took me a while to grasp what Bill was alluding to in his reply but when I re-read it this last time I was like: Hey...that's right! Oftentimes, this is what it takes to convince me there is something in a poem that makes it worthwhile. You give it a passing glance and then you look back a second time and notice, perhaps a subtle metaphor or gentle play on words that makes stop and go: "Huh? Oh! Yeah...OK! Sid BTW, Billy: Every time I see that avatar I chuckle! Every damn time! Sid
07-22-2011, 10:49 AM
it's what i like about poetry. the way a poem can be fresh and new with each read. specially a short like Aish's one here which has less than the conventional number of words in a haiku.
i was 47 when that pic was taken. 
07-23-2011, 12:17 AM
Aish
Very nice. The more I read it the more I liked it. Made me stop and wonder. I like that. Cheers David
07-23-2011, 07:07 AM
Aish, great choice on the centre justification, the poem reminds me of a balloon -- and the words put it just on the edge of bursting. Honestly, every time I read it I relate it directly to some situation I've been in, or narrowly avoided, or know someone who's been there... sometimes, very few words can have very many implications.
Truly an excellent little poem.
It could be worse
07-23-2011, 07:09 AM
Thank you all for your responses!
I was hoping it would speak on many levels, to many situations. Introspection can be a bitch.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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