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"A chump."
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05-03-2011, 02:23 AM
A young green tree
Frivolously embraces a wind With its blooming branches. And whispers to it in lust - "I love very much your kisses!" The cold chaste wind, (What a chump!) in response, Hisses, hisses and hisses ... 
05-03-2011, 05:55 AM
i have the same problem with women.
good metaphorical poem. thanks for the read 
05-03-2011, 08:34 AM
Ooh loved this one, the hissing wind and the eager sapling... like a parable, how well it speaks to genuine experience
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
05-03-2011, 02:45 PM
Billy, Addy!
Thanks a lot for reading and kind comments! Appreciate! R.Y. 
05-03-2011, 07:32 PM
You write like an Ancient Greek or Roman poet, giving life to nature with a lustful comic touch. Marvellous Ris.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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