01-19-2011, 04:02 PM
We had a secret word
one we used when things got rough
Gagged like a horse,
bit in mouth, bridle on head;
She loved the whip’s stroke.
loved to choke…
Forgotten Word
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01-19-2011, 04:02 PM
We had a secret word one we used when things got rough Gagged like a horse, bit in mouth, bridle on head; She loved the whip’s stroke. loved to choke…
01-21-2011, 02:04 PM
Liked this, but the first time I misunderstood the ending, and the intended meaning of that last line. Maybe there's a way to separate it or make it pop out more, so your meaning is clearer but really that's just my opinion. Overall it reads very well, and oddly not so raunchy and much more interesting
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PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
01-31-2011, 06:57 PM
Hi!
Very thought provoking! Like it! R.Y.
02-01-2011, 10:37 AM
thanks for the comments guys.
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