What's In A Word, Anyway? (content warn)

[waitingforgodet]

I’m so hot . . . I need it . . . fuck my pussy.
. . . love the way your cock tears into me.
I’m dripping . . . I’m so wet . . . tear my cunt apart!
Can you hear it? I hear it . . . love the sound of you fucking me, ( tss, tss, tss) . . . oh, sweetheart.

Later that day he composed a poem for her.
He wrote of her beauty and virtues and quoted her outcries like a reporting voyeur.
She accepted the poem smiling, happy,
and said with an ironic giggle that she hoped the poem would be mawkish, sappy.

He did not get the result he expected;
her smile gone,her face infected
(with anger): I DON’T APPROVE OF THE C WORD!
But . . . You said . . . I heard—
I’m a lady . . . I HATE THAT WORD . . . !
What?

WHAT!

[billy]

I’m so hot . . . I need it . . . fuck my pussy.
. . . love the way your cock tears into me.
I’m dripping . . . I’m so wet . . . tear my cunt apart!
Can you hear it? I hear it . . . love the sound of you fucking me, ( tss, tss, tss) . . . oh, sweetheart.

Later that day he composed a poem for her.
He wrote of her beauty and virtues and quoted her outcries like a reporting voyeur.
She accepted the poem smiling, happy,
and said with an ironic giggle that she hoped the poem would be mawkish, sappy.

He did not get the result he expected;
her smile gone,her face infected
(with anger): I DON’T APPROVE OF THE C WORD!
But . . . You said . . . I heard—
I’m a lady . . . I HATE THAT WORD . . . !
What?

WHAT!

i thought it a great write. (though i did put a content warn in the heading less any faint hearted person reads it)

i liked the juxtaposition from the sex to the narrator to the way a womans/persons mind can work. the opposites of the 1st and 3rd verse were excellent and i got a lugh from it which i hope was the intent. i loved the tss, tss, tss. personally i wouldn't change a thing.

thanks for the read.

[waitingforgodet]

Thanks, Billy. Yes, laughter was the intent. By the way, did you get my comments on your Fruit & Vegetables poem? By the way, and, obviously, I found your poem and was able to read it and make a comment; however, when I've clicked on other poets'work, I'm getting the comments and not the poem. I've been navigating better, but still having some problems. I did read your statement concerning bloggers and sites and thought it was very good; some of the things you wrote about inspired a few ideas. I think what you've done here in creating this website and not only offering a forum to get your poems read and getting feedback on them, but also sharing ideas, tools and definitions as well as putting up poetry from the great and classic authors is a great thing. I salute you and the people who have worked with you to create this site--Jim

[billy]

the poems are on page 1, for the poem click on the title in the left of a particular forum for the last reply cklick on the title on the right hand side of the page. thanks on their behalf for the kind words jim. it's still a work in progress and we desperately need a few more poets who can accept honest feedback. (so if you know anyone bring them on over )

i read your reply and replied back to it lol. good to have you with us.