Lunch at the University

[heslopian]

Placed on your bed of onions, like a gypsy girl,
hot tube of meat, inside the steam tray,
you lie innocent until the chilli is poured in,
nestling between the soft bread walls,
coating you, a brown death shroud;
red kidney beans, those purple cells,
poke through the sauce's warm surface,
soldiers sprawled across the Somme,
hands enveloped by red mud.

Fries are added now. I'm handed the plate.
I put it on my tray, then add a chocolate doughnut,
ask for a large coke, hand over my five pounds,
and imagine my intestines, pleading like hags.

[billy]

Placed on your bed of onions, like a gypsy girl,
hot tube of meat, inside the steam tray,
you lie innocent until the chilli is poured in,
nestling between the soft bread walls,
coating you, a brown death shroud;
red kidney beans, those purple cells,
poke through the sauce's warm surface,
soldiers sprawled across the Somme,
hands enveloped by red mud.

Fries are added now. I'm handed the plate.
I put it on my tray, then add a chocolate doughnut,
ask for a large coke, hand over my five pounds,
and imagine my intestines, pleading like hags.

for me it has lots of innuendo. intended or not, in fact it's pretty much in the face fornicating for me lol.

i love the first and last lines.
and the 2nd line. in fact i like it a lot.
it gave me a laugh and thats always good.

the last verse bring me back to reality

thanks for the read jack.

[heslopian]

Thanks for the kind words, Billy I guess phrases like "hot tube of meat" are quite sexual I simply described it how I felt like describing it, without giving much thought to innuendo. I must be pretty starved of affection if I'm subconsciously getting off on a chilli dog

Yeah I think those "gypsy girl" and "hags" similes are my best for a while, partly because they're so simple yet effective, whereas my similes are usually bombastic and weird.

[lizzyrose12]

I saw a post saying this had double meanings/innuendo and I didn't think so, but then I read it over, and it did sound a lot like it had innuendo. Of course, this is coming from a person who can't spell 'innuendo'. I liked it though, it was a good read like other poems of yours I read, I also like this one. You have a lot of talent as a poet! Good job!

[billy]

I simply described it how I felt like describing it, without giving much thought to innuendo. I must be pretty starved of affection if I'm subconsciously getting off on a chilli dog

hey; it could just be i'm perverted lol