Skyline

[addy]

I look as city lights
spike into endless sky
and think;

that’s what we must look like
on the inside.

[srijantje]

hey,good one Addy

[addy]

thanks

[billy]

very deep
thanks for the read

[heslopian]

This is beautiful. Reminds me of the American poet Richard Brautigan, who wrote very short pieces which said a great deal. Once again, just gorgeous. So succinct and powerful.

[Bianca Alabaster]

yes, this is very powerful. Thanks for posting it!

[addy]

wow, thanks a lot guys!

[Ris Yerg]

Cool thought!
Probably "yes" we are!
5 stars + rep. point.
R.Y.

[addy]

Cool thought!
Probably "yes" we are!
5 stars + rep. point.
R.Y.

Thanks very much

[Leanne]

Brilliant imagery My only concern is a grammatical one, in L1 & L2: it reads "I look at city lights spike into endless sky", which ends up very odd as a sentence, and you don't have any oddness anywhere else. So my suggestion is either "I look as city lights spike..." or "I look at city lights spiking..." -- or even (so you can now ignore the either, I suppose), "I look at city lights as they spike..."

Love the last two lines.

[addy]

Thanks Leanne . Done and done.

[kath3]

Good one indeed addy
Great imagery and probably very true.