On rounding thoughts

[jeffalot]

Under red raw sky the call goes out—
Look out! Look out! 
Bulls about!
A dusty haze beats forth, raging
herds of restless thoughts charge by and I
try to jump one to make it stay or to
let it take me away, away! Lasso loops
around, around and slips down — off! Darn! 
Not this time, 
but soon.

[brynmawr1]

Under red raw sky the call goes out—  Under "a" red raw sky....not often I recommend an article, but here matches the more conversational tone of the rest of the poem.  One could even consider a rewording, such as "Under a sky, red raw,/ a cry goes out
Look out! Look out! These two lines seem to be too much, though I get the transition to the next.  It's a tricky edit, though.
Bulls about!
A dusty haze beats forth, raging  could cut 'forth', if not, need a semicolon after "forth".
herds of restless thoughts charge by and I I like the sonics of this line
try to jump one to make it stay or to  gets too vague here with 'one' and 'it'.  Think about how you can rewrite to avoid vague terms.  Don't be afraid to continue the metaphor. 
let it take me away, away! Lasso loops
around, around and slips down — off! Darn! ...around and down it slips, sounds stronger...but consider using 'the rope'.  the rest of the line is implied and can be cut.
Not this time, 
but soon.  I like the ending

Hi Jeffalot,
I really liked this poem, how you tied in a bull run with the effort of gathering one's thoughts.  Consider bringing in more imagery of what a bull run is actually like and work that into your poem.  Sorry if you were trying to avoid comments.
Take care,
Bryn

[jeffalot]

Hi Bryn, 
thank you for your encouragement - I might go back to this one with your suggestions in mind. At the moment, it's more of a doodle than a poem, really. 
Thanks again.