I've traced his face uncounted times.
Forever changing back.
Lost among historic peers,
or pilled in a stack.
His friendship earned is same as saved.
To save him I so pray.
I wouldn't trade him for a thought.
On any given day.
And when he tumbles to the ground,
I stoop to pick him up.
For if I ever need a charm,
He often brings me luck.
Spinning, tossing, flipping yet--
of gentleman, not many;
compare in cost of company to-
my humble Lincoln Penny !
A Penny Ode, in simple words.
Forever may he dwell.
To he who served, so many years,
We pay a sad farewell.
Just got inspired by reading another users Ode on here.
I had started this and so decided to finish it off .
I think the meter is mostly stable except the 4th stanza which i left that way to represent spinning etc...
Anyway, it is a little silly thing.
The Penny deserves it's poems.........
Haha yes indeed, why should only heroes and epic events get odes? Odes for all!
I love the poem, and the meter does seem solid. I know you did not ask but I am trying to get a handle on scansion so I gave a try at figuring out your meter, I shall spoiler it since this is not a criticism channel, but perhaps you could let me know if I am even remotely in the right ballpark?
I've traced his face uncounted times.
xX|xX|xX|xX
Forever changing back.
xX|xX|xX
Lost among historic peers,
Xxx|xX|xX
or pilled in a stack.
xX|xxX
His friendship earned is same as saved.
xX|xX|xX|xX
To save him I so pray.
xX|xX|xX
I wouldn't trade him for a thought.
Xxx|Xx|xxX
On any given day.
xX|xX|xX
And when he tumbles to the ground,
xX|xX|xx|xX
I stoop to pick him up.
xX|xX|Xx
For if I ever need a charm,
xX|xX|xx|xX
He often brings me luck.
xX|xX|xX
Spinning, tossing, flipping yet--
Xx|Xx|Xxx
of gentleman, not many;
xX|xx|xXx
compare in cost of company to-
xX|xX|xX|xXx
my humble Lincoln Penny !
xX|xX|xXx
A Penny Ode, in simple words.
xX|xx|xX|xX
Forever may he dwell.
xX|xx|xX
To he who served, so many years,
xX|xx|xX|xx
We pay a sad farewell.
xX|xX|Xx
To me it looks pretty regular, mostly iambic, with tetrameter starts and trimeter for the rest of the stanzas, except perhaps line 3, which is mostly tetrameter but you have a couple of trimeter ones too, so I am not sure which is the pattern, tetra-tri-tetra-tri, or tetra-tri-tri-tri. I see lots of Pyrrhic, whihc could just be an accent thing, idk. All in all, a hell of a lot more regular than my efforts ever are ::joy::
(Yesterday, 12:45 AM)Mostly Holy Wrote: Haha yes indeed, why should only heroes and epic events get odes? Odes for all!
I love the poem, and the meter does seem solid. I know you did not ask but I am trying to get a handle on scansion so I gave a try at figuring out your meter, I shall spoiler it since this is not a criticism channel, but perhaps you could let me know if I am even remotely in the right ballpark?
I've traced his face uncounted times.
xX|xX|xX|xX
Forever changing back.
xX|xX|xX
Lost among historic peers,
Xxx|xX|xX
or pilled in a stack.
xX|xxX
His friendship earned is same as saved.
xX|xX|xX|xX
To save him I so pray.
xX|xX|xX
I wouldn't trade him for a thought.
Xxx|Xx|xxX
On any given day.
xX|xX|xX
And when he tumbles to the ground,
xX|xX|xx|xX
I stoop to pick him up.
xX|xX|Xx
For if I ever need a charm,
xX|xX|xx|xX
He often brings me luck.
xX|xX|xX
Spinning, tossing, flipping yet--
Xx|Xx|Xxx
of gentleman, not many;
xX|xx|xXx
compare in cost of company to-
xX|xX|xX|xXx
my humble Lincoln Penny !
xX|xX|xXx
A Penny Ode, in simple words.
xX|xx|xX|xX
Forever may he dwell.
xX|xx|xX
To he who served, so many years,
xX|xx|xX|xx
We pay a sad farewell.
xX|xX|Xx
To me it looks pretty regular, mostly iambic, with tetrameter starts and trimeter for the rest of the stanzas, except perhaps line 3, which is mostly tetrameter but you have a couple of trimeter ones too, so I am not sure which is the pattern, tetra-tri-tetra-tri, or tetra-tri-tri-tri. I see lots of Pyrrhic, whihc could just be an accent thing, idk. All in all, a hell of a lot more regular than my efforts ever are ::joy::
Yes, I think you have it !
It uses a lot of Iambic Trimeter
I am really only beginning to understand meter in terms of feet dee Dum etc....
Mainly i just go with what feels good.
Thanks for the analysis and kind words.
