Leaving Summerland

[rowens]

Leaving Summerland


Religion and magic 
are codified madness.

Society, the cult
your demons warned you of.

[dukealien]

So much here:  the surface, that everything is tainted.  But then the inversion, something like Mandeville's private vices, public(k) virtues, in which codification cures, and the demons' warnings are against triumph of their shining opposite, a cult of angels.

[Mark A Becker]

Leaving Summerland I'm interpreting summerland as the afterlife. Interesting to think of the title as Leaving the Afterlife. As in rejecting that idea, or being re-born..

Religion and magic
are codified madness. Not sure about magic, but religion, yeah

Society, the cult
your demons warned you of. Good twist here rowens- my demons often warn me of any large group of people

In short order you have drawn a stark juxtaposition between the literal trappings of cults and the free wheelin nature of our demons.

[rowens]

Any interpretation, including mine, is going to be a codified one. I want lines and poems of multiple realities simultaneously. I don't know if anyone saw my poem called Realms.

But the best, if puny, trick of this poem only exists depending on how fast someone reads the linebreak between the last two lines.

[Mark A Becker]

But the best, if puny, trick of this poem only exists depending on how fast someone reads the linebreak between the last two lines.

Excellent line break there; I paused briefly the first time through, then turned to the last line quicker on second read.

Most everything in society is codified: laws, signs, language, speed limits, etc... I try to be aware of my code of conduct depending upon the situation, and the company I'm in. While my demeanor can be described as offensive at times, I don't approach situations with malicious intent.

I'd like to see more of these short ones from you
...Mark

[rowens]

When I read the poem out loud, since I normally pronounce your as yer, I say the culture demons warned you of.

Also, in my Leopardi poem, the way I speak, the first line says Danger is love, though on the page it says Dangerous love.
So later, when I say Tragedy is art, it has both an awkward and familiar ring to it.
Tragedy is art is an awkward sentence. Though the next line starts with As an autistic person . . . so I'm assuming that, subconsciously, the awkwardness of the previous line is forgiven. And then there is talk of manuals and meaning on the page. And culminating, later, with the confession of the verse being jumbled.


My writing is monomaniacal in style and technique. 

And I'm interested in using suggestive sounds to overlay and underlay the grammatical words to open portals to unstated connections.

[Mark A Becker]

And I'm interested in using suggestive sounds to overlay and underlay the grammatical words to open portals to unstated connections.

Good thing to be interested in. The sound of language can be highly suggestive, and evocative.