Orgasm

[Kerbonzo_beenz]

Euphoria fluctuates from head to toe
in yellow spurts.
A multicolored bubble of joy
escapes a flared nostril.

To truly feel;
incompacitating.
Nuerons crackle like pop rocks in water.

Warm clusters of hands
touching all over,
saliva dripping from them.

Smile, or grimace?
Can't tell between.

[CRNDLSM]

Pain and pleasure

[Todd]

Great title. And I absolutely love:

Nuerons crackle like pop rocks in water.


This is a truly awesome, non-abstract, easy-to-visualize line.

My recommendation is to try to make your poem full of ONLY lines of that quality.