In the Fridge

[dukealien]

In the Fridge (Senryu)


Milk sours?  Yes, Stacey–
for bachelor just as for bachelorette,
milk sours.

First since NAPM (mine, anyway)

[Richard]

Hey Duke,
I like this one, especially how you used repetition, but with different punctuation. Plus, the souring milk is a pretty strong image, but its repetition mirrors the duality of the relationship in the poem.

Good stuff,
Riichard

[billy]

stacey is a great name for people in pieces like this. it got a laugh from me.

In the Fridge (Senryu)


Milk sours?  Yes, Stacey–
for bachelor just as for bachelorette,
milk sours.

First since NAPM (mine, anyway)