9-22-17

[Tiger the Lion]

under a done-to-death moon
you are a swan’s neck—
too perfect to swallow

[Keith]

I like how this disgards the idea of descriptive poetry, then nails it with a overtly descriptive line, I also like the interplay with neck and swallow very well worked and an enjoyable short. Best Keith

[just mercedes]

Very nicely done - loads of images in a few words. Love 'done-to-death moon'.

[LunaDeLore]

under a done-to-death moon
you are a swan’s neck—
too perfect to swallow

Tiger,

I love the sonic of "done-to-death moon" -  the simplicity and impact you've composed in three lines
just amazes me too.


Good work!

Luna