Music In Your Heart

[Yjack123]

Let's see what happens this time.  



Music In Your Heart
 
It can reach deep inside you to touch the very bottom of your soul.
It can press you to a windy flight; within a cloud; surrendering control.
You may paint the empty silence and shape it into such delicious art.
If you keep a little music, just a bit of music in your heart
 
And they will sing, and they will laugh,
And they will wake the sleeping tiger for his autograph,
So show a smile and do your part,
And keep a little music, just a tad of music in your heart.
 
If you quiz a generation, which one is their favorite of them all?
They will smile and close their eyes; throw back their head and lose a gentle call.
Don’t be so fearful of the wonder, maybe we can find our perfect parts.
If we just keep a little music, a tiny cup of music in your hearts.
 
And they will sing, and they will dance,
And they will question every robin on the meaning of romance,
Appoint your stage and do your part,
We shall keep a little music, just a bit of music in our hearts.

[Richard]

Hey Jack,
I actually liked the flow of this. It's sounded nice when I read it aloud. However, I found some of the images to be a bit confusing. I'll go into more detail below:

Let's see what happens this time.  



Music In Your Heart
 
It can reach deep inside you to touch the very bottom of your soul. -I don't know if "bottom of your soul" is a cliché, but it's pretty close.
It can press you to a windy flight; within a cloud; surrendering control.
You may paint the empty silence and shape it into such delicious art. -I like the phrase "delicious art." I just don't know if it adds much to the poem. It would definitely be an image I would suggest exploring more.
If you keep a little music, just a bit of music in your heart
 
And they will sing, and they will laugh,
And they will wake the sleeping tiger for his autograph, -I like this line because it sounds so surreal. Was that your intention here?
So show a smile and do your part, -Why does one have to smile to enjoy music?
And keep a little music, just a tad of music in your heart.
 
If you quiz a generation, which one is their favorite of them all? -I like this image. I think it gets a bit muddled by your rhyming though.
They will smile and close their eyes; throw back their head and lose a gentle call. -How does one "lose a gentle call"? I could be missing something. It wouldn't be the first time.
Don’t be so fearful of the wonder, maybe we can find our perfect parts. -This line doesn't really add much the first image in this stanza (the quiz for each generation).
If we just keep a little music, a tiny cup of music in your hearts.
 
And they will sing, and they will dance,
And they will question every robin on the meaning of romance, -Again, I like this line because of its surreal nature.
Appoint your stage and do your part,
We shall keep a little music, just a bit of music in our hearts. -This line gets repeated with slight variations throughout the poem. I would suggest dropping these lines because the title already made the main point of these lines.

Overall, I think you have a decent start here. I would mainly suggest cutting some parts and seeing where you end up.

Cheers,
Richard