Lava

[Tiger the Lion]

Lava
 
Up here on the crust
it’s a delicacy;
the puberty of wanton rock—

God’s sweat.
 
We speculate that all is cool
but we don’t get comfortable yet.

[vagabond]

Lava
 
Up here on the crust
it’s a delicacy;
the puberty of wanton rock—

God’s sweat.
 
We speculate that all is cool
but we don’t get comfortable yet.

I like "delicacy", and also "god´s sweat". you made a lot out of lava.
maybe the last line would be stronger if you erase "but we"

[RiverNotch]

Lava
 
Up here on the crust can't help but feel like this should end with a comma, but doesn't matter.
it’s a delicacy; comma instead of semicolon.
the puberty of wanton rock—

God’s sweat. space unnecessary, i think. "God's sweat" is interesting to describe lava with, but "sweat", in this context, is too nebulous: sweat of nerves? sweat of hard work? sweat of sex? sweat of actual heat? for a being who controls the weather, it could easily be all four. change not -- it is a very interesting line -- just reconnect to the above.
 
We speculate that all is cool "speculate" diffuses the punch -- most everything else, but for the isolated word "delicacy" and the common-enough word "comfortable" is mono-to-disyllabic.
but we don’t get comfortable yet.

overall, hot. thanks for the read.