Android's prospective

[Donald Q.]

New features, sure, but such high power
consumption. My gyroscopes are finely balanced,
can the same be said for this new model? A marketing campaign
is no substitute for real character and a proven track
record. No I've not met one but I saw one, on a balcony,
to me it looked unstable. Yes, they will say I've bitterness
in my circuits but I'm really considering what's best
for everyone, plus my resentment is indicative
of my relatable programming. Really it gets
to a point where you have achieved all you can
and from then on everything else is just
shuffling cutlery whilst the dinner goes cold.

 

New features, sure, but such high power
consumption. My gyroscopes are finely balanced,
can the same be said for this new model? A marketing campaign
is no substitute for real character and a proven track
record. No I've not met one but I saw one, on a balcony,
to me it looked unstable. Yes, they will say I've bitterness
in my circuits but I'm really considering what's best for
everyone, plus my resentment is indicative of my
relatable programming. Really it gets to a point where
you have achieved all you can
and from then on everything else is just
shuffling cutlery whilst the dinner goes cold.

[ellajam]

Thanks, , love this, a laugh and a cry. I can't figure out your breaks in the second half, but maybe I will. good read.

[Lizzie]

Great ending line, DQ.

[milo]

Prospective or perspective ?

[Donald Q.]

I've changed some of the line breaks now because they were a bit janky, cheers Ella
I didn't edit this poem, just tossed in in for fun because I'm lazy, but I might come back to it.

And yes, prospective.

[milo]

I've changed some of the line breaks now because they were a bit janky, cheers Ella
I didn't edit this poem, just tossed in in for fun because I'm lazy, but I might come back to it.

And yes, prospective.

well, prospective is an adjective, so you should lose the possessive and change the inversion - Prospective Android - not really sure what that would mean but at least it would be grammatically  correct.

[Donald Q.]

Yeah it was supposed to using the adjective as a noun, like with retrospective.
It would be more correct for what I mean to say Android's prospect, but I just don't like that as much.
I guess I am bending English a bit too much, apologies.

[nibbed]

Hi DonaldQ

it's clever, kinda sad...
I smiled,
No I've not met one but I saw one, on a balcony,
to me it looked unstable.

maybe it would be cool
to reformat or perhaps change the fonts
to a DOSlike text  �


best wishes!

[ellajam]

Yeah it was supposed to using the adjective as a noun, like with retrospective.
It would be more correct for what I mean to say Android's prospect, but I just don't like that as much.
I guess I am bending English a bit too much, apologies.

It had me thinking prospectus, what the new model will be, that might work.

[Donald Q.]

Yeah, I though people might associate 'prospectus' solely with university or college though.