[i carry your gum with me(i carry it on]

[just mercedes]

i carry your gum with me(i carry it on
my sole)i can’t seem to scrape it off(everywhere
i go it goes,you slob;and whatever i try
it won’t let go, keeps adhering,you slattern)
                                                   i need
new shoes(for these were Lauren,biatch)i want
the best(your apathy is unsurpassed,you bag)
and it’s you are whatever listless has always meant
and whoever a mess will always make is you
 
here is the open secret everyone knows
(here is the grind of the jaw and the chud of the cud
and the pie in the eye from a lazy wife;who chucks
rather than find a bin or wrap it up)
and this is the lover who’s keeping me stuck on her
 
i carry your gum(i carry it on my sole)
 
 



e.e. cummings has always irritated me to the max with his self-indulgent spacing and punctuation. I copied them, and his phrasing, from his poem [i carry your heart with me(i carry it in]

I don't like Emily D's work for the same reason. So bite me.

[Lizzie]

i carry your gum with me(i carry it on
my sole)i can’t seem to scrape it off(everywhere
i go it goes,you slob;and whatever i try
it won’t let go, keeps adhering,you slattern)
                                                   i need
new shoes(for these were Lauren,biatch)i want
the best(your apathy is unsurpassed,you bag)
and it’s you are whatever listless has always meant
and whoever a mess will always make is you
 
here is the open secret everyone knows
(here is the grind of the jaw and the chud of the cud
and the pie in the eye from a lazy wife;who chucks
rather than find a bin or wrap it up)
and this is the lover who’s keeping me stuck on her
 
i carry your gum(i carry it on my sole)
 
 



e.e. cummings has always irritated me to the max with his self-indulgent spacing and punctuation. I copied them, and his phrasing, from his poem [i carry your heart with me(i carry it in]

I don't like Emily D's work for the same reason. So bite me.

I want to marry this one >< ><

I actually really like ee cummings because he made the English language his biatch

I think it's a clever subversion of the original.

It's full of surprising language and images. The only line I don't think reads well is "and whoever a mess will always make is you."

Otherwise, I find it delightful!

[ellajam]

Ha, this one stayed with me, past the lol it speaks to the reality of love.

[next]

Wonderful poem. It's indeed a faithful Cummings parody, up to and including
a significant subject.

I do SO love Cummings (who, along with Emily, seems currently out of favor).
I love his odd syntax (of which punctuation marks are a part), a syntax he uses
to convey meanings that normal syntax cannot.

The spacing though... is not that often used to good effect; it doesn't possess
the logical consistency of his syntax and it usually irritates me no end.

Picky nit : When it came to his name, E. E. Cummings always used capitals.

And poor Emily! She can't catch a break these days. I blame it on the large, fawning
fan base that her work amassed. They succeeded in pissing off untold numbers of genuine
readers. (Sylvia Plath's fate was a worse one than hers, and for much the same reason.)

I love Emily are for her dreadful puns, riddles, and trickster humor.  She amused herself
well in that garden (and me along with her).

[Lizzie]

Next,

I love Emily & Sylvia!
Their fans are here,
but we hide in fear
of the poetry police.

[ellajam]

Next,

I love Emily & Sylvia!
Their fans are here,
but we hide in fear
of the poetry police.

The Pen belongs to its members, feel free to riot in the streets, the worst that can happen is a boot in the Arse.

I haven't read the bell jar in 40 years but I picked up a copy not long ago, haven't opened it but it's around. Emily sure has her gems.

[next]

Next,

I love Emily & Sylvia!
Their fans are here,
but we hide in fear
of the poetry police.

The Pen belongs to its members, feel free to riot in the streets, the worst that can happen is a boot in the Arse.

I haven't read the bell jar in 40 years but I picked up a copy not long ago, haven't opened it but it's around. Emily sure has her gems.

I read the Bell Jar in the late 70's, years after her suicide and in the midst of a resurgent tide of feminism.
Because of that context, I was prepared to love it. Maybe I expected too much, maybe I missed its finer points,
but I was disappointed. Only the parts dealing with mental illness stood out to me. It would be interesting to read it
again after so many years, but I have a long list of other books and most of them are above it. (I later found the
feminism I had yearned for contained within the poetry of Adrienne Rich.)

[billy]

by gum

[Southern Scarab]

Next,

I love Emily & Sylvia!
Their fans are here,
but we hide in fear
of the poetry police.

The Pen belongs to its members, feel free to riot in the streets, the worst that can happen is a boot in the Arse.

I haven't read the bell jar in 40 years but I picked up a copy not long ago, haven't opened it but it's around. Emily sure has her gems.

I read the Bell Jar in the late 70's, years after her suicide and in the midst of a resurgent tide of feminism.
Because of that context, I was prepared to love it. Maybe I expected too much, maybe I missed its finer points,
but I was disappointed. Only the parts dealing with mental illness stood out to me. It would be interesting to read it
again after so many years, but I have a long list of other books and most of them are above it. (I later found the
feminism I had yearned for contained within the poetry of Adrienne Rich.)

I had to read it twice before I appreciated it fully  I picked it up because I knew it dealt with mental illness and gender relations and so on, but she's kind of bizarrely nonchalant about them. The story's predominately personal, which is why I missed it's quality the first time through. Now, I cry. A lot. I give it a fried chicken and caviar out of a possible ten.