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		 (04-12-2016, 03:58 PM)Todd Wrote:  Or billy, you could call it "List Poem by a Robot"  
 Clever idea.
 I would think a list poem by a robot would go
 
1 
0 
1 
0 
0 
1
 
and so on. xD
 
 
GIULIETTA DEGLI SPIRITI
 
1 
Leaving my philandering husband Giorgio, I quickly set out 
to make a mistress of myself to Sangria -- 
that is to say, as I boarded Jose's rickety boat 
to Spain, I got myself 
roaring drunk.
 
2 
Who rides a boat to Spain? 
Me and Gabriella took the train --
 
3 
Sometimes I wonder if I'm really still Giulietta, 
as I sit up smoking after love.
 
4 
Me? I know I'm no longer Giorgio -- now, you call me Giorgina. 
One night, after love, 
I dreamed my sex was being pulled off of me bloodlessly, 
like a stub of tallow stuck awkwardly between the legs. 
That was the only change. Yet still, you and all others 
acted as if I were finally complete, 
as if I were your sister, fulfilling your dream 
of a thirst quenched.
 
5 
The first thing we did once we reached Barcelona 
was visit that famous unfinished cathedral, 
Sagrada Familia. The name alone 
made me shed a tear, 
although I remember 
it was not one for sadness.
 
6 
That business trip I took -- I actually flew Gabriella 
all the way to Hong Kong for a painting. 
"Interior d'un Cafi". I told her seeing Paris 
captured through the eyes of a complete stranger, 
a revolutionary 
who fought against Spain's stranglehold 
over his country, 
was better than actually going there.
 
7 
I told Jose, I did not want to live by the sea again. 
But he refused, insisting the salt 
would help clear my lungs. That was my problem, 
he said, becoming breathless 
over every little thing.
 
8 
In fact, my plan was 
to go to Tunisia -- she complained 
with your voice, when she learned. 
Why take the long way? she asked. 
Why not go by boat? 
I said I wanted to retrace the steps of our ancestors, 
the Romans, reenact the farce 
of the Punic Wars, eventually 
of Aeneas leaving Dido.
 
9 
Leaving you, I thought the spirits 
would stop haunting me. Didn't I conquer them, 
if not in this world of phenomena 
then in the world of my memories, 
your films? But they returned 
one night, after love. 
Neptune again rose from the sea, 
again brought with him his great barge 
of decay --
 
10 
Then Venus appears next, in her golden veil 
and tight bikini -- then Bacchus the young god 
with the girlish black hair and the over-shaven face 
and the white breasted raiment that in your memories 
still didn't distract from his sex -- then Pluto 
or maybe Saturn burning your favorite doll -- 
then Jupiter your grandfather the lord of the heavens 
flying through the mists to his 
mistress Parisienne -- then what again? 
Now I don't remember. That story you told me, 
explaining why you were so breathless 
after your brief visit to the neighbor's, 
I wasn't really listening.
	 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Yes RN,
 You are correct. The robot overlords would agree with your poetic assessment.
 
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		i will revisit and do an actual poem i promise     (04-12-2016, 03:58 PM)Todd Wrote:  Or billy, you could call it "List Poem by a Robot"  
 Clever idea.
		
	 
	
	
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		 (04-12-2016, 04:05 PM)RiverNotch Wrote:   (04-12-2016, 03:58 PM)Todd Wrote:  Or billy, you could call it "List Poem by a Robot"  I would think a list poem by a robot would go
 Clever idea.
 
 1
 0
 1
 0
 0
 1
 
 and so on. xD
 
 GIULIETTA DEGLI SPIRITI
 
 1
 Leaving my philandering husband Giorgio, I quickly set out
 to make a mistress of myself to Sangria --
 that is to say, as I boarded Jose's rickety boat
 to Spain, I got myself
 roaring drunk.
 
 2
 Who rides a boat to Spain?
 Me and Gabriella took the train --
 
 3
 Sometimes I wonder if I'm really still Giulietta,
 as I sit up smoking after love.
 
 4
 Me? I know I'm no longer Giorgio -- now, you call me Giorgina.
 One night, after love,
 I dreamed my sex was being pulled off of me bloodlessly,
 like a stub of tallow stuck awkwardly between the legs.
 That was the only change. Yet still, you and all others
 acted as if I were finally complete,
 as if I were your sister, fulfilling your dream
 of a thirst quenched.
 
 5
 The first thing we did once we reached Barcelona
 was visit that famous unfinished cathedral,
 Sagrada Familia. The name alone
 made me shed a tear,
 although I remember
 it was not one for sadness.
 
 6
 That business trip I took -- I actually flew Gabriella
 all the way to Hong Kong for a painting.
 "Interior d'un Cafi". I told her seeing Paris
 captured through the eyes of a complete stranger,
 a revolutionary
 who fought against Spain's stranglehold
 over his country,
 was better than actually going there.
 
 7
 I told Jose, I did not want to live by the sea again.
 But he refused, insisting the salt
 would help clear my lungs. That was my problem,
 he said, becoming breathless
 over every little thing.
 
 8
 In fact, my plan was
 to go to Tunisia -- she complained
 with your voice, when she learned.
 Why take the long way? she asked.
 Why not go by boat?
 I said I wanted to retrace the steps of our ancestors,
 the Romans, reenact the farce
 of the Punic Wars, eventually
 of Aeneas leaving Dido.
 
 9
 Leaving you, I thought the spirits
 would stop haunting me. Didn't I conquer them,
 if not in this world of phenomena
 then in the world of my memories,
 your films? But they returned
 one night, after love.
 Neptune again rose from the sea,
 again brought with him his great barge
 of decay --
 
 10
 Then Venus appears next, in her golden veil
 and tight bikini -- then Bacchus the young god
 with the girlish black hair and the over-shaven face
 and the white breasted raiment that in your memories
 still didn't distract from his sex -- then Pluto
 or maybe Saturn burning your favorite doll --
 then Jupiter your grandfather the lord of the heavens
 flying through the mists to his
 mistress Parisienne -- then what again?
 Now I don't remember. That story you told me,
 explaining why you were so breathless
 after your brief visit to the neighbor's,
 I wasn't really listening.
 
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		Tues day 
        Cancel hospital appointment 
        Shop for b-day cake / meal / new bandage for wrist. 
        Order fourteen loads of two inch to dust  
         (stone for car park, so check crush index)  
        Try ringing Jas (again!) 
        Speak to vet about blood test 
        Quickly label sloe and revenge 
        Wash out trani tank and slow pump sloe, 
                                           (avoid aeration). 
        Bulk blend fruit cider 
        Filter fruits into BT 
        Analyze bright tank and bright blend fruits.
 
Shop project – cut insulation boards to size  
                     (times one inside wall, 3 outside). 
                     Cut shiplap to length. 
                     Nail up. 
Orchards - Spray quince trees with fungicide.
 
Tue night
 
     Cook tea 
     Light  fire 
     Feed horses, dogs, family 
     Take Myka to Jas to meet Oscar and mate 
     Hover bedroom and change sheets. 
     Kiss husband – light birthday fire.
 
Tue lights out
 
     "Shit forgot to write poem!   
      Where did I note down the prompt list?"
 
* Spoiler: this poem will need a lot of work 
       (Ps is actually my work list: Monday headline -- Lack of time forces poet to give up)
	
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		^^^   tell me about it, mine might be a poem someday.
 
Two Above the Kitchen Cabinets
 
an early mixer with green juicer and bowl 
the bat-mobile, still in its box 
three gurgling pitchers shaped like fish  
old-time gas pumps (bank, radio, beverage dispenser) 
a japanese couple sculpted by an italian 
old oil cans and rusted marshmallow tins 
two-foot-square cast chocolate cordial molds 
a Casper jack-in-the-box, a toy accordian 
the lidded jar with cherry handles grandpa's cousin made 
a license-plate from your brother, NY54
 
My monkey, once a circus souvenir 
rides atop a tiger from your daughter, 
when dusting time comes around 
neither one of us can complain.
	
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		You know, these all have music and interest to them, but RiverNotch, oh wow, yours blew me away. Beautiful, inventive, light-hearted but not too cute, strange! -- just a pleasure to read.
	 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		 (04-12-2016, 04:05 PM)RiverNotch Wrote:   (04-12-2016, 03:58 PM)Todd Wrote:  Or billy, you could call it "List Poem by a Robot"  I would think a list poem by a robot would go
 Clever idea.
 
 1
 0
 1
 0
 0
 1
 
 and so on. xD
 
 GIULIETTA DEGLI SPIRITI
 
 1
 Leaving my philandering husband Giorgio, I quickly set out
 to make a mistress of myself to Sangria --
 that is to say, as I boarded Jose's rickety boat
 to Spain, I got myself
 roaring drunk.
 
 2
 Who rides a boat to Spain?
 Me and Gabriella took the train --
 
 3
 Sometimes I wonder if I'm really still Giulietta,
 as I sit up smoking after love.
 
 4
 Me? I know I'm no longer Giorgio -- now, you call me Giorgina.
 One night, after love,
 I dreamed my sex was being pulled off of me bloodlessly,
 like a stub of tallow stuck awkwardly between the legs.
 That was the only change. Yet still, you and all others
 acted as if I were finally complete,
 as if I were your sister, fulfilling your dream
 of a thirst quenched.
 
 5
 The first thing we did once we reached Barcelona
 was visit that famous unfinished cathedral,
 Sagrada Familia. The name alone
 made me shed a tear,
 although I remember
 it was not one for sadness.
 
 6
 That business trip I took -- I actually flew Gabriella
 all the way to Hong Kong for a painting.
 "Interior d'un Cafi". I told her seeing Paris
 captured through the eyes of a complete stranger,
 a revolutionary
 who fought against Spain's stranglehold
 over his country,
 was better than actually going there.
 
 7
 I told Jose, I did not want to live by the sea again.
 But he refused, insisting the salt
 would help clear my lungs. That was my problem,
 he said, becoming breathless
 over every little thing.
 
 8
 In fact, my plan was
 to go to Tunisia -- she complained
 with your voice, when she learned.
 Why take the long way? she asked.
 Why not go by boat?
 I said I wanted to retrace the steps of our ancestors,
 the Romans, reenact the farce
 of the Punic Wars, eventually
 of Aeneas leaving Dido.
 
 9
 Leaving you, I thought the spirits
 would stop haunting me. Didn't I conquer them,
 if not in this world of phenomena
 then in the world of my memories,
 your films? But they returned
 one night, after love.
 Neptune again rose from the sea,
 again brought with him his great barge
 of decay --
 
 10
 Then Venus appears next, in her golden veil
 and tight bikini -- then Bacchus the young god
 with the girlish black hair and the over-shaven face
 and the white breasted raiment that in your memories
 still didn't distract from his sex -- then Pluto
 or maybe Saturn burning your favorite doll --
 then Jupiter your grandfather the lord of the heavens
 flying through the mists to his
 mistress Parisienne -- then what again?
 Now I don't remember. That story you told me,
 explaining why you were so breathless
 after your brief visit to the neighbor's,
 I wasn't really listening.
 
This is terrific, thoroughly enjoyed!
	 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		 (04-12-2016, 04:05 PM)RiverNotch Wrote:   (04-12-2016, 03:58 PM)Todd Wrote:  Or billy, you could call it "List Poem by a Robot"  I would think a list poem by a robot would go
 Clever idea.
 
 1
 0
 1
 0
 0
 1
 
 and so on. xD
 
 GIULIETTA DEGLI SPIRITI
 
 1
 Leaving my philandering husband Giorgio, I quickly set out
 to make a mistress of myself to Sangria --
 that is to say, as I boarded Jose's rickety boat
 to Spain, I got myself
 roaring drunk.
 
 2
 Who rides a boat to Spain?
 Me and Gabriella took the train --
 
 3
 Sometimes I wonder if I'm really still Giulietta,
 as I sit up smoking after love.
 
 4
 Me? I know I'm no longer Giorgio -- now, you call me Giorgina.
 One night, after love,
 I dreamed my sex was being pulled off of me bloodlessly,
 like a stub of tallow stuck awkwardly between the legs.
 That was the only change. Yet still, you and all others
 acted as if I were finally complete,
 as if I were your sister, fulfilling your dream
 of a thirst quenched.
 
 5
 The first thing we did once we reached Barcelona
 was visit that famous unfinished cathedral,
 Sagrada Familia. The name alone
 made me shed a tear,
 although I remember
 it was not one for sadness.
 
 6
 That business trip I took -- I actually flew Gabriella
 all the way to Hong Kong for a painting.
 "Interior d'un Cafi". I told her seeing Paris
 captured through the eyes of a complete stranger,
 a revolutionary
 who fought against Spain's stranglehold
 over his country,
 was better than actually going there.
 
 7
 I told Jose, I did not want to live by the sea again.
 But he refused, insisting the salt
 would help clear my lungs. That was my problem,
 he said, becoming breathless
 over every little thing.
 
 8
 In fact, my plan was
 to go to Tunisia -- she complained
 with your voice, when she learned.
 Why take the long way? she asked.
 Why not go by boat?
 I said I wanted to retrace the steps of our ancestors,
 the Romans, reenact the farce
 of the Punic Wars, eventually
 of Aeneas leaving Dido.
 
 9
 Leaving you, I thought the spirits
 would stop haunting me. Didn't I conquer them,
 if not in this world of phenomena
 then in the world of my memories,
 your films? But they returned
 one night, after love.
 Neptune again rose from the sea,
 again brought with him his great barge
 of decay --
 
 10
 Then Venus appears next, in her golden veil
 and tight bikini -- then Bacchus the young god
 with the girlish black hair and the over-shaven face
 and the white breasted raiment that in your memories
 still didn't distract from his sex -- then Pluto
 or maybe Saturn burning your favorite doll --
 then Jupiter your grandfather the lord of the heavens
 flying through the mists to his
 mistress Parisienne -- then what again?
 Now I don't remember. That story you told me,
 explaining why you were so breathless
 after your brief visit to the neighbor's,
 I wasn't really listening.
 
I was too tired to read anything last night, but I'm glad I came back to this one. Section 10 especially you ended with power. Great read!
	 
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		good one, RNThe good Thomas Andrews: a listing poem ![[Image: 26455794795_3167357d1b_b.jpg]](http://farm2.staticflickr.com/1480/26455794795_3167357d1b_b.jpg) 
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		04-16-2016, 04:41 PM 
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		 (04-16-2016, 03:28 PM)Achebe Wrote:  good one, RN
 The good Thomas Andrews: a listing poem
 
 
 ![[Image: 26455794795_3167357d1b_b.jpg]](http://farm2.staticflickr.com/1480/26455794795_3167357d1b_b.jpg) 
xD Dammit, Achebe. Yet still, no Liszst poems.
 
Ooh, and thanks for all the feedback! But for the most part, I think I was just copying Fellini, especially with that list.
 
 
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		These list poems are crazy good.  I am seriously impressed at the creativity here.  I feel incapable of a clever list poem.
	 
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