Psychideli
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Psychdeli

Have you ever tried the deli on Mars?
Where Aliens chill, smoking space cigars.
Try a sandwich opened-face,
with protein from an extraterrestrial race. 

You might like species 55.601 
served on a green ciabatta bun. 
Topped with leafy things,
glowing colors you have never seen. 

Behind the case there is Bork,
your non-binary friend who hates Björk. 
Their taste in rare deli meats, 
is our solar-systems finest treat.

Friends come from far an wide
in ships galaxies can't confine. 
Sharing news of a utopic place,
where a good sandwich can escape. 

Welcome sir, to the Psychideli.
Where strange things fill you belly. 
Located in the Milky Way.
Hope you come back for a stay.
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
Bunx
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#2
After Bork and Björk I was waiting for Mork too, as in Mork and Mindy.
But his non appearance didn't spoil my enjoyment of the poem though. I would definitely go, the 'atmosphere' seems really good.

Cheers for the read,

Mork Mark
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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#3
(02-26-2016, 04:55 AM)Bunx Wrote:  Psychdeli

Have you ever tried the deli on Mars?
Where Aliens chill, smoking space cigars.
Try a sandwich opened-face,
with protein from an extraterrestrial race. 

You might like species 55.601 
served on a green ciabatta bun. 
Topped with a leafy things, thing
glowing colors you have never seen. 

Behind the case there is Bork,
your non-binary friend who hates Björk. 
Their taste in rare deli meats, 
is our solar-systems finest feat. treat ?

Friends come from far an wide
in ships galaxies can not confine. that galaxies can't
Sharing news of a utopic place,
places where a good sandwich can escape. you don't need to say places again and it reads better without it

Welcome sir, to the Psychideli.
Where strange things fill you belly. 
Located in the Milky Way.
Hope you come back for a stay.

Great fun Bunx and good concept, I definitely want one of them space cigars, hope you don't mind I made some suggestions for a quick edit just to smooth out a few things. Best Keith

If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out
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#4
Thanks for the edit! Ya I thought I would take a break about writing about super serious subject matter and have some fun! I enjoy having fun much more, less of a headache and the process comes more quickly.
i'll save you a space cigar!

Ambrosial- Really stoked you liked this! Hopefully as much as I have enjoyed your work! Really dug writing with a sci-fi theme. Maybe Mork and Mindy will be the next poems subject matter!
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
Bunx
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#5
It sounds like a lot of fun!
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