prime directive edit 1 (milo)

[tectak]

Just to
insult you
all, I write this poem.
The words mean nothing to me.
What matters is, that true to form, I wrote it.
Not one of you should you eulogise or falsely praise me.
That it exists at all should be reason enough to quick delete it.
So please, before the thing extrapolates into infinity...critique it.

Please note...no malice aforethought to anyone, but this is a long held view.

tectak

[milo]

2 is a prime number.

[Grace]

Giant Swallowtail Caterpillar
is a poem and
a piece of shit.

(If you don't believe me-
Google it ).

[tectak]

2 is a prime number.

Fuck...it is the imperfections that make for beauty. Anyway, who said it has anything to with with prime numbers?

Best,
tectak

[milo]

Just thought I would start an off topic discussion . . .

[Leanne]

"Not one of you should you eulogise or falsely praise me"... this obviously means that we should ALL do it, every one of us, all at once, especially those who are new to the forum and really really really want to use up lots of words so that we think they're leaving a proper critique because they somehow believe that all the mods are robots who only count words and don't actually look at quality so look at how many words I've managed to leave on your poem omg this is amazing keep writing forever and ever

[milo]

All hail Tom.

[Leanne]

I will
not interfere
with internal development
as long as I don't have to watch you multiplying randomly
in your chaotic meiosis with your gametes spreading nasty smears across my petri dishes and making such a dreadful mess
in an un-interfered-with stream of buttery alien spunk
that divides and becomes yet more
fodder for God-
zilla

[Mark A Becker]

HAH! Hey Tom-

Don't worry about it, anymore "its" and it'll fall apart all on its own.

Also, you forgot to line up the last line- the one that starts with "Please note..."

Very appropriate title, as the prime directive of the poem is that it is "true to form", as it is constructed using binomial coefficients of prime numbers, which are than cleverly reconstituted as actual words.

Thus, the fact that the "words mean nothing" is mathematically correct, as the ratio of the number of syllables in the 4th line, when added to inverse square of the number in the fifth line, is precisely "0" (or "nothing"-- its linguistic equivalent).

Unfortunately, you can't divide by zero. And that is where the pyramid reveals a negative tendency toward infinity. (It would work, however, if you stood it on its tip.)

I'm (almost) impressed.
... Mark

[tectak]

HAH!  Hey Tom-  

Don't worry about it, anymore "its" and it'll fall apart all on its own.  

Also, you forgot to line up the last line- the one that starts with "Please note..."

Very appropriate title, as the prime directive of the poem is that it is "true to form", as it is constructed using binomial coefficients of prime numbers, which are than cleverly reconstituted as actual words.  

Thus, the fact that the "words mean nothing" is mathematically correct, as the ratio of the number of syllables in the 4th line, when added to inverse square of the number in the fifth line, is precisely "0" (or "nothing"-- its linguistic equivalent).  

Unfortunately, you can't divide by zero. And that is where the pyramid reveals a negative tendency toward infinity. (It would work, however, if you stood it on its tip.)


I'm (almost) impressed.  
... Mark

Ah, mark. Nothing really matters...without it where would we bi.

Best,
tectak

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Just thought I would start an off topic discussion . . .

Aw shucks...OK, I will correct it. Just.
tectak

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Giant Swallowtail Caterpillar
is a poem and
a piece of shit.

(If you don't believe me-
       Google it ).

If course it is, grace, of course it is...now just try to sleep.

tectak

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I will
not interfere
with internal development
as long as I don't have to watch you multiplying randomly
in your chaotic meiosis with your gametes spreading nasty smears across my petri dishes and making such a dreadful mess
in an un-interfered-with stream of buttery alien spunk
that divides and becomes yet more
fodder for God-
zilla

Oh shit, what have I (mark) started.
tectak

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"Not one of you should you eulogise or falsely praise me"... this obviously means that we should ALL do it, every one of us, all at once, especially those who are new to the forum and really really really want to use up lots of words so that we think they're leaving a proper critique because they somehow believe that all the mods are robots who only count words and don't actually look at quality so look at how many words I've managed to leave on your poem omg this is amazing keep writing forever and ever

Yup...happens alll the time. Go on, falsely praise me.
Best,
tectak

[Mark A Becker]

well well well,looks like funny stuff goin on in the nuthouse. It IS the "For Fun Forum" after all.

Praises be. Falsely of course...
... Mark

[ellajam]

Oh,
Tom,
I bow
in worship.
Your meter's my heart,
you create a jigsaw puzzle
of a thousand pieces with your skillful way with rhyme.
If only I could read enough and by osmosis capture your knack I'd die happy.

[Leanne]

Look out Tom, Ella's after your knackers.

[tectak]

Oh,
Tom,
I bow
in worship.
Your meter's my heart,
you create a jigsaw puzzle
of a thousand pieces with your skillful way with rhyme.
If only I could read enough and by osmosis capture your knack I'd die happy.

Purfect.
tec.