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Rag Doll
In the beginning people
would applause and praise her
(she was such a cute and witty little thing),
until they realized she was devoid
of meaning—she was a farce, a trick—
and so they passed her by, as she cried.
It was no fault of hers, that her
creator had no depth to him,
and in whose hand the nib was numb
to the expensive 25% rag bond paper;
ink spent like coins in a fountain.
–Erthona
©2014
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A different feel to this one than your other stuff, methinks.
You can't hate me more than I hate myself. I win.
"When the spirit of justice eloped on the wings
Of a quivering vibrato's bittersweet sting."
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NN
Thanks, it's nice to know I have a defined style, although I'm not entirely sure if that is a good thing or a bad thing
Seriously though thanks for taking your time to read it and comment on it, always appreciated.
Dale
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I just meant more of a feeling tone. Like I felt something new poking through there.
You can't hate me more than I hate myself. I win.
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I was just attempting humor at my expense, I had no problem with your comment.
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no comments except i like the idea of a poem being a rag doll.
"how's the rag doll doing" they'd all ask
and the reply would be
"it's well fucked"
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Not to mention sodomized!
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Hard hitting.
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(07-21-2014, 07:32 PM)ellajam Wrote: Hard hitting.
Yes a numbed nib can be a hard thing to deal with as it just pokes around randomly without any finesse.
Reminds me about the story of the blond girl who had bruises all around her belly button....she had a blond boyfriend!
Dale
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The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
