Commuting (Edit 1.1)

[bena]

I know an ex-monk, want me to ask?

[ellajam]

I know an ex-monk, want me to ask?

Sure, why not? If it belongs in a monk's cup I'll find a way to make it work.

[ChristopherSea]

I've seen those little organ-grinder 'Monks' with cups.

[ellajam]

I've seen those little organ-grinder 'Monks' with cups.

ha, good point.

[ellajam]

Ha, Trappist monks brew ale. Good thing this is posted in Fun.

[justcloudy]

HAHA you got a chuckle-out-loud from me with that edit. Love it. Thumbs up.

[outcast]

Line one suggests a Mustang...only horses know the way.
Poetic meter, parking meter...were you going to meet her?
I like the way this piece demonstrates how poetic consideration pervades everyday life. Fortunately, trafficking in rhyme isn't a crime.
Don't axe the monk's cup...how would he eat?

[ellajam]

Line one suggests a Mustang...only horses know the way.
Poetic meter, parking meter...were you going to meet her?
I like the way this piece demonstrates how poetic consideration pervades everyday life. Fortunately, trafficking in rhyme isn't a crime.
Don't axe the monk's cup...how would he eat?

Worse, how would he drink?

Hey, you, welcome.

[billy]

i don't usually give crit in the fun section except to say i enjoyed the poem, this one especially so.
i can't see as it needs any more dits and as a warning you'd be safer texting while you drive and not editing poetry

[ellajam]

i don't usually give crit in the fun section except to say i enjoyed the poem, this one especially so.
i can't see as it needs any more dits and as a warning you'd be safer texting while you drive and not editing poetry

ha, as long as I come to before my exit slides by I'm ok.