"- Dusk -"

[Obadiah Grey]

Gathering silence
in mustering of the dark-
hollow beats the heart.








My one and only attempt at a Haiku, a form which I hate with a passion.

Feel free to rip the nuts off it !!!

[rowens]

The second line isn't very good, but I like it so that makes it good as far as I'm concerned. Then there's the third line, and it's the same way, I guess.

[Obadiah Grey]

The second line isn't very good, but I like it so that makes it good as far as I'm concerned. Then there's the third line, and it's the same way, I guess.

Yeah,, I thought the second line was the best !!,,, it just goes to show how wrong I can be; I'm fine with it being not very good btw,

This is actually snipped off a longer piece,,, equally as bad I'm afraid.
thank you for your thoughts.

Obi.

[rowens]

They're not the best or most original lines, and I don't like short poems like this all that much either, but this comes through for me.

[ChristopherSea]

O, it almost translates to gathering silence in gathering dark or is it just me?