[Ivy Addresses an Oak]

[HalfOpenArms]

You were the scaffolding
by which I hauled myself skyward.
If not for you,
I would have never seen the sun.

[hankabadpoet]

I personally enjoy the conciseness of the work, after all, "brevity is the soul of wit". I also would like to note the, perhaps, moralistic qualities of it, it seems to speak to the importance of giving thanks, of seeing the good that the world has done for you. Is there anything you can say about the inspiration behind it? Other than that... The beauty of its simplicity is quite appealing to me.
Hank

[mea18]

The ability to convey feelings in such a short amount of words is what I love about this style of poetry.
I interpreted this poem as a past relationship that ended, but during that relationship, you learned
your true identity. You saw "the sun" (yourself/potential) with the help of your partner.
I must agree with Hank as well, the simplicity is what keeps me repeating this poem in my head.
Great job

[billy]

the first line is solid, it means something, it has an image of something.
the second has an image but isn't as solid (in such a short poem all the wortds should count as much as possible) that hauled me skyward] or something more succinct.
the last two lines say a lot to say a little.
great effort

You were the scaffolding
by which I hauled myself skyward.
If not for you,
I would have never seen the sun.

[HalfOpenArms]

the first line is solid, it means something, it has an image of something.
the second has an image but isn't as solid (in such a short poem all the wortds should count as much as possible) that hauled me skyward] or something more succinct.
the last two lines say a lot to say a little.
great effort

You were the scaffolding
by which I hauled myself skyward.
If not for you,
I would have never seen the sun.

"the last two lines say a lot to say a little." Oh boy, I can't tell if you meant for this to be positive of negative. I'll play it safe safe and assume the latter, and edit accordingly.

How's this:

You were the scaffolding
that hoisted me skyward,
showed me the sun.

Thanks for the kind words, everyone!

[trailertrash]

the first line is solid, it means something, it has an image of something.
the second has an image but isn't as solid (in such a short poem all the wortds should count as much as possible) that hauled me skyward] or something more succinct.
the last two lines say a lot to say a little.
great effort

You were the scaffolding
by which I hauled myself skyward.
If not for you,
I would have never seen the sun.

"the last two lines say a lot to say a little." Oh boy, I can't tell if you meant for this to be positive of negative. I'll play it safe safe and assume the latter, and edit accordingly.

How's this:

You were the scaffolding
that hoisted me skyward,
showed me the sun.

Thanks for the kind words, everyone!

Don't care for 'hoisted'; 'lifted', if you must. The changes have made this passive. Before, you were hauling yourself, now the oak did all the work; did you not climb the scaffolding? Glad you kept 'skyward', anyway.

[HalfOpenArms]

Right. I think I'll leave it as I had it.