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Twilight time, the ghouls unleashed,
like dark Santa's in reverse,
to each house they drag their bags,
saying lines so oft rehearsed.
'Trick-or-Treat' means give me candy,
with each assault upon the doors,
flying like a pack of witches,
greedy to collect still more.
Sugar coma, the mighty fall,
still no worse than I have seen,
just the signal that we're through,
with this latest Halloween!
2013 -Erthona
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Love the 'dark Santa's in reverse!' Yes, I get that sugar coma the next week consuming what the little ghouls left behind.
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The Santa line and the final stanza we're standouts, Dale.
Fun light-hearted poem! I think ghouls is an appropriate name for the scurrying masses on Halloween.
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Just following Chris' suggestion. Thanks.
Thanks Todd, I can see you have also been on a few candy runs on Halloween. My youngest is eleven, so just about at an end. I get why my parents enjoyed staying home so much and just handing out candy. Halloween has always been my favorite holiday, but this is the first time I have written a poem about it.
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The dark Santa's in reverse line was also the one that stood out by far to me. It was a great visual and I also especially liked how it refereed to a different holiday. I think that knowing that Halloween is your favorite holiday and that this is your first time writing a poem about it, I encourage you to write more about it! This poem seemed to be your parent perspective, I would love to hear about your experience as the child growing up and what this holiday meant to you then. 
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(10-11-2013, 02:06 AM)Erthona Wrote: Just following Chris' suggestion. Thanks.
Thanks Todd, I can see you have also been on a few candy runs on Halloween. My youngest is eleven, so just about at an end. I get why my parents enjoyed staying home so much and just handing out candy. Halloween has always been my favorite holiday, but this is the first time I have written a poem about it.
Dale
We love it too Dale. My wife and I dress up to give out candy, while we enjoy assorted hors d'oeuvres and cocktails.
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Thanks Malu,
Strangely, Christmas is the holiday I write about most, for me anyway, much more fodder for the cannon. That and a happy, jaunty poem is almost atypical for me. Halloween for me as a child was fun, but in a cliche type of way, I'm afraid not much to wrap a poem around. I enjoyed the creative side of Halloween, creating the costume (we didn't buy them from stores), or haunted houses. I guess I always enjoyed creating the things that people liked to experience, rather than experiencing things others had created.
Dale
"We love it too Dale. My wife and I dress up to give out candy, while we enjoy assorted hors d'oeuvres and cocktails."
I'm a kind of a, drink hot chocolate and eat my own candy kind of guy
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Santa had a little dark helper in his good old, literal days.
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Santa was much more sinister in the old days. Didn't he also stop and beat the bad children?
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I'll ask my mama, I think she was alive back then. She looks it.
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Po Po Mama, but I also look like that and it is way before my time...unless she's over 400 years old.
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