Within my dreams

[Poetborn]

Beautiful pictures is what I dream
, Like my brothers and my sisters no longer being a fiend, is what I dream.
Beautiful views is what I what I see
, like Martin Luther, even the King and his children alive swinging on that very same swing
, Is what I dream
Brighter visions with deeper intutions is what I dream
, Just like Human beings cocerned about their fellow human beings
, Instead of deeming them hopeless, even demons, this is what I dream
Mix races with beautiful faces is what I dream
A site of love meaning love and certainly not a fling this what I dream
Without care of social status or whos irde is the baddest is what I dream
A certain place full of bliss whereI would no longer have to dream
Is what I dream.

[Savanna]

I probably shouldn't comment on your punctuation, because I still haven't got my own right in verse yet, but I will just ask you why you started out with commas at the beginning of some of your verse's lines and some not.

I like the flow of your dream and connections, that is a way to open up the imagery your trying to convey.

Anyhow I picked yours as no one had commented and because I love anything connecting to dreams and hope for a brigher future..which your poem opens us to see.

[Snowbells]

Hi there;
I wondered about your comma placement as well, but now I realize that it has everything to do with style. In a way, it reminds me of E. E. Cummings' writings that often lacked capital letters, proper punctuation and proper grammar. Since you seem to make use of the odd comma placement in each of your posts, I'm convinced that it's done for style. I do like the message you conveyed in this poem. Take care. J.