Nap time stories
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Stop fighting or I’ll belt the pair of you,
get over here and lie on your sunbeds.
Go easy she said they're both tired,
instead of shouting tell them a story.

The dragon didn’t come easily
but the two boys had it in chains,
it would fetch a good price at………….

She tore through the building
fighting the battle of all battles
both boys clutching to her wings…….

The giant fireball melted the robots
who spilled clockwork innards
as the tried to escape the.

Silence fell around the pool,
nodding heads curled into beds,
my voice trailed off soft,
relaxing I picked up my paper.

You can’t leave it there,
said a man behind me.
No what happens next?
said another and another.

Truth was,
my muse was asleep
and I had no idea.
Ah well pass me that Sangria.

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#2
It made me smile, especially the last stanza and 'spilled clockwork innards' (brilliant image).
I think 'there' in L3 should be 'they're'.
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#3
(08-14-2013, 12:22 PM)Volaticus Wrote:  It made me smile, especially the last stanza and 'spilled clockwork innards' (brilliant image).
I think 'there' in L3 should be 'they're'.

Many thanks Volaticus for your kind words and the crit much appreciated L3 has been changed. This did actually happen although the story may have been a different one Smile Best TOMH

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