Here

[shepdog329]

Im here
In solitude
Confined in my own self
The reason to start a new one
Im there

[savino76]

I like the theme of solitude. Your poem instantly calmed me.

[rowens]

I've read all your poems here. You're on to something, but not much of it's been formed yet.

[Volaticus]

To me it seems more like notes for a poem, rather than a full poem. You could build from what you have and expand the ideas with imagery and original phrasing. Give the reader an idea of who the narrator is. Why is he/she alone? Where's 'here' and 'there' more exactly? Just some suggestions you could build on.

[shepdog329]

its a cinquian

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