A poem about writing poems
#1
My pencil hits the paper
What shall I write next?
Where is the inspiration
There must be some out there somewhere

War Perhaps
A series of poems
Yes its coming to me now
An epic series of poems
About a war and its soldiers

No that's not it
Maybe a love letter
To my high school sweet heart
That would be nice

No that's still not it
Maybe this poem is it
Yes, I found my next poem
A poem of writing poems
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#2
Hi, this made me chuckle. The last resort when writers block sets in. There are some elements that I like, but I think it would read better with more punctuation. I know everyone has their own thoughts about whether poems work with or without punctuation, but I think especially in the middle two stanzas punctuation could control how it comes across and emphasise the train of thought aspect.
War and love letter were obviously chosen for a good reason. The only other thing I would say is that I would change the title. For some reason I have a bad habit of not reading titles before I read the poem, but in this case it served me well because the last line came as more of a surprise and that's why I laughed. Had i read the title I dont think I would of.
Thanks for the read,
Mark
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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