For days and months and years.

[tanglefoot]

Tired, useless spun out tears may fall
for wasted time and wasted years.
Will I ever feel myself, what's more
will I ever feel fulfilled and whole?
Can I sever ties with you, without tears
For days and months and years and years.

[rowens]

Did you write this for someone, or is it just made up? If it's a real life message, you should give it to the person it's about. If not, do you have any other poems? There isn't much to this one.

[tanglefoot]

Did you write this for someone, or is it just made up? If it's a real life message, you should give it to the person it's about. If not, do you have any other poems? There isn't much to this one.

I suppose I wrote this more for myself than the person it is directed at. All my 'poems' are but a few words, and there is probably not much in them for anyone but myself....but I do thankyou for taking the time to offer feedback. much appreciated.

[cidermaid]

I have read your poem and the reply you gave to Rowens and from my read you seem to have written three sets of couplets that could now be expanded into three stanzas.
As you (rightly) mention yourself that "there is probably not much in them for anyone but myself" ...how about reworking these lines to give your readers some images and insight into what prompted these thoughts.

My suggestion would be if you want to write a poem for someone other than yourself, perhaps you could use these couplets as questions to yourself. Such as :why do my tears feel tired and useless and wasted...and why have they gone on for so long? Then turn this question into some metaphores and images that others can visulise.
Hope this is of some help
All the best AJ.