Mr. Marlboro Man

[Brownlie]

Mr. Marlboro man:

I’ve seen you on the T.V. Mr. Marlboro man
You were a man
But I was not a man, and you were not that sort of man
I wished to be.

I saw you dying Mr. Marlboro man
Grey hanging tubes,
An oxygen tank
A stoma

Even then your voice was synthesized Mr. Marlboro Man
Robotic and raspy and I thought I’d never smoke.
But when life set me a cinder it proved back then I was just billowing smoke

I saw you Mr. Marlboro Man
But I didn’t care
You will not notice all the burned out butts for days
But they pile up and when you see them there is already too much
Perhaps it rained within a month
And the butts can become brown and crusted
They are the epitome of waste

I saw you Mr. Marlboro Man
But I didn’t care

[rowens]

I like it all right. The doctor is really looking for epiphanies, and the more paltry the better.

And I can relate to it. I can relate to it even when it's read ironically, or sarcastically.

I once told a member of my aunt's church that man doesn't live on bread alone. She said: "Don't quote Shakespeare to me!"

[Brownlie]

I like it all right. The doctor is really looking for epiphanies, and the more paltry the better.

And I can relate to it. I can relate to it even when it's read ironically, or sarcastically.

I once told a member of my aunt's church that man doesn't live on bread alone. She said: "Don't quote Shakespeare to me!"

Thanks for reading, I got up in the morning and listened to
Tom O'Bedlam's channel on youtube and perhaps became overly excited and posted this poem. You the man for leaving feedback!
Now I've changed the poem I originally posted I hope I don't get in trouble by the admin...

[tectak]

I like it all right. The doctor is really looking for epiphanies, and the more paltry the better.

And I can relate to it. I can relate to it even when it's read ironically, or sarcastically.

I once told a member of my aunt's church that man doesn't live on bread alone. She said: "Don't quote Shakespeare to me!"

Thanks for reading, I got up in the morning and listened to
Tom O'Bedlam's channel on youtube and perhaps became overly excited and posted this poem. You the man for leaving feedback!
Now I've changed the poem I originally posted I hope I don't get in trouble by the admin...

Sure beats the shit out'a me!
What are we criting here?
Mr. Nasty, ( You are forgiven but I am still me)
tectak

[serge gurkski]

interesting move.

[Brownlie]

I won't post any poems for awhile. This site is addicting but circumventing the rules like a weasel is stupid

[rowens]

You've left plenty enough feedback to post two poems without anyone getting mad about it. And it's a new day. Unless swapping one poem for another was somehow part of the mood.

[serge gurkski]

I won't post any poems for awhile. This site is addicting but circumventing the rules like a weasel is stupid

Come on. It was funny. Do as rowen said: post both. :-) That is fairer to the commenters. Besides: I liked the other one better.
Remember: comedy. ,-)

cheers
serge