3 am (a short attempt at iambic pentameter)

[heslopian]

I'm walking up the stairs at 3 am.
I change my clothes and yawn very loudly,
a thrush's song beyond my window's view.
Tonight is filled with tunes and black silence.

[tectak]

I'm walking up the stairs at 3 am.
I change my clothes and yawn very loudly,Ver..rie?
a thrush's song beyond my window's view.
Tonight is filled with tunes and black silence.Sy....lence?

Close.

Ooops, I shouldn't be here! I am in my pyjamas and want a piss and I am now in the wrong ward!!!Sorry,
Best,
just passing (urgh!)
tctak

[billy]

it's the for fun forum guys

i often change my clothes while walking up stairs also

[Heartafire]

it's the for fun forum guys

i often change my clothes while walking up stairs also

I know its for fun. Not a critique, just having fun with the lines.

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I'm changing out of my pajamas and going to work.

A fine poem though I found it rather dark for the fun poetry.
Regardless, enjoyed it immensely.

[AisforApple]

"tunes and black silence" Awesome. As an insomniac, I've seen 3 am too many times.

[heslopian]

Thank you for your comments tectak, trueenigma, Bilbo, Heartafire and AisforApple I put this in "for fun" because I felt that it was just a brief playing around with iambic pentameter, rather than a serious attempt to convey something.

[billy]

i think 3 am is a bit of cheat

[heslopian]

haha Yeah I thought it might be too!