Senses of Heartbreak

[Glittercake]

I worked harder on this one. I tried to give it more depth.

I close my eyes,
but I still see
her face
in front of me.

I put my hands in my pockets,
but I still feel,
My love for her
I thought I'd lost it.

I hold my nose,
and cover my mouth
I try to drown myself out.

I cover my ears,
but I can still hear
My heart is breaking,
Loud and clear.

[Heartafire]

I worked harder on this one. I tried to give it more depth.

I close my eyes,
but I still see
her face
in front of me.

I put my hands in my pockets,
but I still feel,
My love for her
I thought I'd lost it. I might say" my love for her I thought I'd lost", this last line doesn't sound grammatically correct

I hold my nose,
and cover my mouth
I try to drown myself out.

I cover my ears,
but I can still hear
My heart is breaking,
Loud and clear. I really love this final stanza

Very touching read, I think you could smooth out some of the wording
but all in all, it's a nice poem.
best,
Heart