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(03-10-2013, 10:46 AM)tectak Wrote: (03-10-2013, 10:41 AM)serge gurkski Wrote: (03-10-2013, 10:22 AM)tectak Wrote: (03-10-2013, 06:36 AM)serge gurkski Wrote: (mean :-) )
Serge...SERGE!.....wake up! You're talking in your sleep! Wake up! Now look what you've done! I've just washed that straight-jacket and you've gone and spilt your night-night guinness all over it! Whose a sticky boy...eh? Whose a very sticky boy?
as the dreamt-of playground of your prick's inner- and utmost desires I came to rethink your sexy talk:
"I'm going in deep.
(Love me, babe, love me like you know me.)
I'm going in slow.
(Hurt me, babe, in this dark I am your pain.)
I'm going in hard.
(Feel me, babe, for just this time, you own me)
I'm going in fast."
that would not please me as much as you could:
Let me help you, loverdear:
1. I am going in slow.
2. I am going in deep.
3. I am going in fast.
4. I am going in hard.
Hope you can readjust your penetrations. Naaah! An englishman needs time!
Go to bed.
pout! you're ever so evasive everytime you really almost get into it. Oh you Englishmen! you were'nt that bad. darn.
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Not evasive, just coy.
I'm a little disappointed not to see a reference to the great English "one, two, three, foreplay"!
It could be worse
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(03-10-2013, 11:01 AM)Leanne Wrote: Not evasive, just coy.
I'm a little disappointed not to see a reference to the great English "one, two, three, foreplay"!
spare me that!
evasively ivasive. all credits too Tom. Not bad. Makes me wet.
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(03-10-2013, 11:01 AM)Leanne Wrote: Not evasive, just coy.
I'm a little disappointed not to see a reference to the great English "one, two, three, foreplay"!
Don't do foreplay these days.....do physio instead 
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I dunno why. I just don't like it.
It's like watching a classy woman starting to shake her ass to Snoop Dog.
I'll be there in a minute.
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I know he is not the cutest, but what the fuck: let em have it if he needs it.
I am all open for his funny attacks.
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(03-10-2013, 05:09 PM)newsclippings Wrote: It's like watching a classy woman starting to shake her ass to Snoop Dog.
It's a lovely Rubenesque arse though.
It could be worse
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(03-10-2013, 05:09 PM)newsclippings Wrote: I dunno why. I just don't like it.
It's like watching a classy woman starting to shake her ass to Snoop Dog. Hi news,
Yours is a measured response...on the one hand, I am glad you don't like it....because I don't either. On the other hand, should we NOT like poetry just because we don't like the content.
I may have to eat those words as I intend having a rake through serge's latest tome...there are bound to be bits I cannot swallow.
I am trying too hard to read the metaphor in your comment as you intended because the poem is actually about a young woman, new to prostitution, thinking her thoughts whilst at work, wishing the shag was more than it is....and her client thinking HIS thoughts and wishing much the same. In the end, the money goes one way only.
Best and thanks for the insight and for caring about me,
tectak
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Ya, but all so meaningless and who was it you had in mind and who you thought to impress at first? When you came up with prostitution did not you describe yourself best, as being a whore to newbies to satisfy their urgent needs to being critiqued in a pleasing them most kind of ways?
and why you come up with a new story now deteriorating the ground your once so strongest point was based upon? Should it really be for that single reason that you lost your shaky grounds your pun rested upon right from the start?
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03-10-2013, 07:41 PM
(This post was last modified: 03-10-2013, 07:41 PM by billy.)
i've seen all the frivolity going on and i'm not sure it's a good thing, the cock slapping post did give me a giggle though  anyway, i'll give some serious feedback below.
(03-09-2013, 07:56 PM)tectak Wrote: I'm going in deep.
(Love me, babe, love me like you know me.) is this line needed?
I'm going in slow.is this line needed?
(Hurt me, babe, in this dark I am your pain.)is this line needed?
I'm going in hard.is this line needed?
(Feel me, babe, for just this time, you own me)is this line needed?
I'm going in fast.is this line needed?
(Fuck me, babe, again,again,again)is this line needed?
I'm going in fast.is this line needed?
( Kill me, babe, take me to the sky)is this line needed?
I'm going in fast.is this line needed?
( Love me, babe, love me like you care)is this line needed?
l'm coming, you're mine.is this line needed?
(Love me, babe, love me 'til I cry)is this line needed?
I'm coming, I'M THERE!is this line needed? (the shout had me laughig out loud)
(Love me...love me...love me...love me...love me...LOVE ME)is this line needed?
tectak
2013 all in all tom, it was a great edit
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tometec:"your night-night guinness"
Ha!
yorkshiremen again: you was lucky havin guiness
etc
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(03-10-2013, 07:41 PM)billy Wrote: i've seen all the frivolity going on and i'm not sure it's a good thing, the cock slapping post did give me a giggle though anyway, i'll give some serious feedback below.
(03-09-2013, 07:56 PM)tectak Wrote: I'm going in deep.
(Love me, babe, love me like you know me.) is this line needed?
I'm going in slow.is this line needed?
(Hurt me, babe, in this dark I am your pain.)is this line needed?
I'm going in hard.is this line needed?
(Feel me, babe, for just this time, you own me)is this line needed?
I'm going in fast.is this line needed?
(Fuck me, babe, again,again,again)is this line needed?
I'm going in fast.is this line needed?
( Kill me, babe, take me to the sky)is this line needed?
I'm going in fast.is this line needed?
( Love me, babe, love me like you care)is this line needed?
l'm coming, you're mine.is this line needed?
(Love me, babe, love me 'til I cry)is this line needed?
I'm coming, I'M THERE!is this line needed? (the shout had me laughig out loud)
(Love me...love me...love me...love me...love me...LOVE ME)is this line needed?
tectak
2013 all in all tom, it was a great edit Billy, you are incorrigible!
I can see you standing there in your stained long-johns, going through the loose copper in a knotted handkerchief, still redded up....and asking for change from a fifty-pence piece!
No....none of the lines are needed...it is an unsaid piece...should be all in the mind...as I am sure it is in yours!
Best,
tectak ( Funny how crap gets the most interesting comments!)
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my step dad kept his money in a hanky, i still stole it 
so far, this is my favourte thread, for many reasons. while it may not be the ilyad you could try and make a silk purse out of sows ear
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we are still improving on our hexameters. Billy . (despite Tom's incomprehensible sturbornessimess. tsk tsk ! good boy cum You on. There is money in it. !
and I displeased my real lover once more and have enough booze for Sunday. So perfect for starters, no?
for starters therefore this:
http://youtu.be/MYJzF4IBXrw
I must love becuzzz Uh always considuh the Tomboy as the travels with my aunt by Graham Greene ex banker guy.
Bad me
selfslap lol
No but a deep gulp of de rum pour moi petit fils. ;-)
cumon tommy try to be a man once. 'ts not that hard?
I'll defend you from mammary-bearers as long as contact still hurts you.
see, Tommysweet, she has small tits and is still hot like hell. but don't you be afraid of her. She'll do nothing but do you good. Just you better don't apply your comma regulations on her.
that would be the most displeasurable thang to do.
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poor escorial.! That was mean by Leanne.
back to Tom:
tectak ( Funny how crap gets the most interesting comments!) ya! indeed. all the serious bs for nuttin.
there is Iliad, Ulysees, Aeneid, Argonautica hm ... (and but that's an inside: info the Dionysiaca
http://www.theoi.com/Text/NonnusDionysiaca1.html.
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Well, tectak, in my analogy, I meant that you were the classy woman
and the ass shaking to Snoop Dog is this poem you've just put out.
I'll be there in a minute.
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(03-11-2013, 09:06 AM)newsclippings Wrote: Well, tectak, in my analogy, I meant that you were the classy woman
and the ass shaking to Snoop Dog is this poem you've just put out.
totally agree 
saeity.
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(03-11-2013, 09:11 AM)saeity Wrote: (03-11-2013, 09:06 AM)newsclippings Wrote: Well, tectak, in my analogy, I meant that you were the classy woman
and the ass shaking to Snoop Dog is this poem you've just put out.
totally agree
saeity.
Well girls, that's very kind of you both but like the two of you I call'em as I see'em. Whatever comes along I'll hitch a ride on. It may be just poetry but it sure is getting deadly round here when an old dog-child of the sixties gets labelled a classy bitch for penning a piece of porny prose...still, it could be worse: it could be true
Best,
tectak
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Monsieur le tectak, stop feeling sorry for yourself and get on with some proper critique this forum NEEDS YOU!
saeity.
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