The Fergusonian Impact

[serge gurkski]

Put your hands on the keys and listen.
Hear the beat and make it real.
Grab a fat bass line and
fantasize with your right.

Swing loud! Lose yourself!
Lose your self to me!
You are on a good track now.

I can feel you: Your
keys talk to me.

They say things I like.
They hop and dance
around my heart.

You warmed me up. Can you feel it
with your hand on my heart.

I’m not needy but I cherish
Your getting closer.

We sit over tea and we fumble,
finding out about us.

You need a map to keep up
to where you have been.
I deliver and want to bite
your finger.

You are places I have not been yet.

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* give it one minute. Ferguson is babbling. But then. ;-)

http://youtu.be/REAlPEWq33c

[heslopian]

This poem reminds me of "Every Breath You Take" by The Police in the way it looks like a sweet love song, but is really creepy and about obsession. I like the use of terms like "bass" and "keys" to evoke an imagined spiritual connection through music. Thank you for the read

[serge gurkski]

The extended metaphor is I teach her how to play (with me). ;-)
I love Every breath you take, but was into big brass Jazz (Maynard)-
Maybe they're related. I dunno.

Thank you for your comment!


serge

[serge gurkski]

Had to rename this because the lady was not pleased. Ok with me.
One can't win all the time. sad but true (and then not that sad anymore). Been there. ,-)

cheers

me

[newsclippings]

I can't tell if I like this and how awkward the lines end and start (with capital letters even though the sentence wasn't done--I do that sometimes too). I'm sorry if you weren't going for awkward, but the pauses and breaks make me feel like I need to catch my breath, and yes, this does sound very much like a song. I really like the content too, but the first line's exclamation point seems a little cheesy when I read it, but maybe I just don't like punctuation.

[serge gurkski]

Good morning newsclipping,

I usually do not use caps in every line anymore. I was just lazy here. The setting of this is a piano lesson given to the woman addressed by the writer. ;-)
Awkwardness is quite a (not intended, I confess, but) acceptable association. The situation,these lines are based upon, did make me feel a bit awkward and I tried to soothe myself by listening to Maynard Ferguson.
Will try to make these lines a bit easier readable now.

Thank you for looking into this one and your comments. :-)

cheers
Serge