A heart throbs anthem

[Kelseymclemore]

Don't waste your time on me.
Ill never give as much as I've received
It's just who I am, and ill never change

My lack of compassion, some may say,
or my relentless ability to push people away.
I'm not trying to play with you ,
you just ran to my arms.
How can I ignore someone who's no harm?

Let me remind you I didn't press start
you came to me, you lit the spark.
Ill agree, there was flames,
but they weren't from my heart

To me, this was a game, and I thought you felt the same.
Let my walk away now,
without any shame,
cause it's not my fault you feel this way

[heslopian]

Don't waste your time on me.
Ill never give as much as I've received "I'll"
It's just who I am, and ill never change "I'll"

My lack of compassion, some may say,
or my relentless ability to push people away. I like the phrase "relentless ability", especially in this context.
I'm not trying to play with you ,
you just ran to my arms.
How can I ignore someone who's no harm? Interesting idea.

Let me remind you I didn't press start
you came to me, you lit the spark.
Ill agree, there was flames, "I'll". Also I think "was" should be "were".
but they weren't from my heart Great line. Crude and angry in a slightly subtle way.

To me, this was a game, and I thought you felt the same.
Let my walk away now, "me"
without any shame,
cause it's not my fault you feel this way

The poem furrows very old ground, as most love poems do, but though there's not a lot of character and action you enliven the subject with some interesting lines. Thank you for the read

[brandontoh]

Don't waste your time on me.
Ill never give as much as I've received
It's just who I am, and ill never change -- This stanza seems kind of cliche. Not that it's not good, but being more creative with your ideas make your poems more interesting. For example:

It's the selfish gene,
To take more than what I give.
Change is called for but it's unlikely.

Essentially it's talking about the same thing, but the presentation downplays how cliche it is. Not saying that I write real well though, just hoping my example is apt. Of course, I like the poem the way it is, but people who're tired of seeing the same lines written in the same way may not be interested in reading on.

My lack of compassion, some may say,
or my relentless ability to push people away.
I'm not trying to play with you ,
you just ran to my arms.
How can I ignore someone who's no harm? -- This stanza is nice. The more personal and informal style puts the readers into the character's mind, and well, it's a vast improvement from the first stanza in my opinion.

Let me remind you I didn't press start
you came to me, you lit the spark.
Ill agree, there was flames,
but they weren't from my heart

To me, this was a game, and I thought you felt the same.
Let my walk away now,
without any shame,
cause it's not my fault you feel this way

Overall the poem is quite concise, and the message is clear. The imagery may be a little weak, but that's not the star of the piece. While it feels kind of cliche, it did not delve into cheese territory. Thanks for the read, and I hope I'm of help. =)