Enchanted

[Fathima]

Does this make any sense?

His suffering
Beauty
Enchanted
Her misguided
Heart

[arbil_poieo]

Hey Fathima,
It makes sense.
I would write it like this instead:
His suffering
beauty
enchanted
her misguided
heart.
The caps at the beginning of each line threw me off because at first I thought it was several thoughts instead of just one. It's romantic and I like the use of "enchanting" a beautiful word that doesn't get used as often.

[billy]

almost, with very short poems you can play about with the enjambment to see what works best.

His suffering Beauty
Enchanted
Her heart misguided

i'd also advise against all caps when using no grammar,

Does this make any sense?

His suffering
Beauty
Enchanted
Her misguided
Heart

[Todd]

Hi Fathima, sure it makes sense. You have interesting constructions. Here are my thoughts on this short piece:

I don't know if enchanted is your best title choice. I think that distinction belongs to "Beauty" then cut beauty from the poem. Here's how that would look.

Does this make any sense?

Beauty

His suffering
Enchanted
Her misguided
Heart

Just a thought.

Best,

Todd