--preoccupied--

[benthejack]

sitting by a quiet river,
a beautiful scene,
my mind is preoccupied,
with thoughts of a big-mac.

[Keith]

sitting by a quiet river,
a beautiful scene,
my mind is preoccupied,
with thoughts of a big-mac.

Mmmm mine wasn't but it is now nice contrast

[billy]

in my poem its a kfc chicken

[TwistedAngel]

thought this wos hilarious..erm soz if it werent meant to be

[Jae Mc Donnell]

sitting by a quiet river,
a beautiful scene,
my mind is preoccupied,
with thoughts of a big-mac.

woop woop next stop my thigh
I also really hope this was meant to be funny

[benthejack]

sitting by a quiet river,
a beautiful scene,
my mind is preoccupied,
with thoughts of a big-mac.

woop woop next stop my thigh
I also really hope this was meant to be funny

haha yeah, was definitely a piss take.

[Jae Mc Donnell]

haha yeah, was definitely a piss take.
[/quote]Thank god mate. Didn't want someone sitting at home thinking (those pricks me here pooring my heart out and this is what I get.. Strongly worded letter that's what's happing now.. No even better a poem and the I'll post it.....awhh)......HA
Anywho very funny poem mate.Thumbs up.

[davidbenjamindix]

with thoughts of a big-mac.

I was hoping I wouldn't be the first to say it! What a juicy, wonderful phrase. Oh man am I hungry, and I hate you for it. (just kidding)

[heslopian]

I don't think the second line is needed. Without it you could almost have a haiku. The third comma could also go. All in all it's a funny poem, countering a somber image with a cockeyed punchline. Thanks for the read

[Arriedo]

not gonna lie, now i want a big mac.