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Void
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12-02-2012, 12:06 PM
We are made in halves.
How can I give my all when I don't have my all to give? How can I be my when the best of me is in us? We are made in halves. So please make me whole. 
12-02-2012, 01:27 PM
We are made in halves.
How can I give my all when I don't have my all to give? How can I be my //did you mean my best? when the best of me is in us? We are made in halves. So please make me whole. I think you asked too many questions. Should of stated My all isn't mine to give i think. It was still good. Isn't It Evil to Live Backwards~Loaded Lux I'm Batman, act up and I'll squeeze Hecklers/You'll die before the first clip drops, Heath Ledger!
12-03-2012, 07:03 AM
i really liked this until the last line
"So please make me whole"..just so soooo needy an makes the author seem weak..who wants someone weak right ? imo if you started with a question then maybe end it on a question.. 'So how can I ever be whole?'..puts the ball back into the readers court kinda thing without the author losing face errm if that makes any sense  
01-11-2013, 08:59 AM
(12-03-2012, 07:03 AM)TwistedAngel Wrote: i really liked this until the last line that makes sense..I like that advice! thanks. |
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