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Pine it was, soft wood harried hard
by phantom kicks to bruised imaginings
unhungry eater of slaughtered dreams
it smouldered slowly
inside out, like the making of a Koori canoe
Closed, it became a paddle.
The river has one end
and one beginning.
Title from Todd's
thread in Poetry Practise.
It could be worse
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"by phantom kicks to bruised imaginings" great line.
An original idea and kinda unexpected for such a broad title. I like what you've done with this.
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Such creative handling of the wood and the hollowing out of a person, beautiful imagery and phrasing. Titles seem to be able to push creativity in odd ways. Love what you did with this Leanne.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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Thanks folks.
As Archimedes pointed out, sometimes all you need is a place to stand -- or a title to anchor the idea.
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I know what you mean...give me a large enough lever and I can write emo...
Hmmm, the quote might be different.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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a little, but it will do
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(12-01-2012, 03:16 PM)Todd Wrote: I know what you mean...give me a large enough lever and I can do an emo...
Hmmm, the quote might be different.
fix/d
nicely done leanne. In some ways, closed doors allow us more freedoms.
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(12-01-2012, 06:28 PM)billy Wrote: (12-01-2012, 03:16 PM)Todd Wrote: I know what you mean...give me a large enough lever and I can do an emo...
Hmmm, the quote might be different.
fix/d
nicely done leanne. In some ways, closed doors allow us more freedoms.
Wow! Thanks Billy you've opened up so many new possibilities for me.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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Every line adds weight to another perfectly crafted.
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out
