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A Theologian Considers the Consequence REV 11-25-12

A Theologian Considers the Consequence REV 11-25-12
Leanne Offline
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#21
11-25-2012, 02:12 PM
"ignite" is definitely more active -- plus it has shorter, more exciting sounds; "hunger" will gnaw away, not being too upset by its second place
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#22
11-25-2012, 02:17 PM
Got it, thanks for the discussion.
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#23
11-26-2012, 09:08 AM
Okay, new revision up. A few cosmetic changes, one strophe rearrangement, and line two provisional change.
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#24
11-26-2012, 09:17 AM
not sure about the 'to' but the 'one' being removed works well.
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#25
11-26-2012, 09:05 PM
I'm not sure about the to yet either. I keep wanting to pull up ignite or drop it back down. I'm going to wait with it though until it resolves between bias and right choice.

Thanks Billy
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