Dance of the Dead

[Mayflow]

I dreamed a dream of a dream-maker true
and I asked if the dream were true
and the dream-maker asked of me
"AND, Whom are you?"

Enlightenment pulsated right through my veins
and verily enchanted my human brain
"I AM THAT I AM" He said, but then took the
form of a Butterfly instead, and then invited me

to the dance of the dead ....

[Todd]

A fun piece. It's not a critique forum so just a few light suggestions.

The first stanza sounds good when read out loud. The only bumps I had was true in the first line. It would sound better if cut. If the speaker has to ask the question in line 2 than true seems out of place in line one. In line four it should be who not whom. I liked a lot of your word choices your verily to go with your burning bush I AM statement. I also liked the dreamlike transformation.