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'I was minding my own business
a-chomping bacon and eggs.'
' But did you look?'
' I sort of did...'
'You shouldn't; she
Is just nineteen, a kid'
'Only -- --- legs?'
' No -no! Read a book
Instead! Like me!'
' 'But I like her plenty
and in another year,
it would still seem queer
As she will then be twenty!'
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the day you stop looking is the day you is definatley dead
really liked this wos well funny
..gives me a image of you being told off by your wife
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Thank you -I had quite forgotten this. No, not me,(perish the thought, to use a good hackneyed phrase
) and wife no longer in a position to criticise, being dead. At the time I wrote it, I thought there was something tremendously clever about it, I think the idea that, no matter how many years passed, the gap would always be the same, but it no longer seems as smart . I am glad it gave you a smile, anyway. E
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well the age gap would be the same but not the mental one IMO
am very different person (i think) to when i wos 16 an will probly be a different person again at 30 an maybe different a bit more if i make it to 40
i reckon once you got to 40 you probly experianced most of all there is so 40,50,60 etc etc mentally you all gonna be on the same level
^^^errm does that make sense
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''i reckon once you got to 40 you probly experianced most of all there is so 40,50,60 etc etc mentally you all gonna be on the same level''
Don't you believe it!
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10-18-2012, 09:08 AM
(This post was last modified: 10-18-2012, 09:08 AM by billy.)
i missed this one abu.
what did the dashes represent? ( i did use my own words of course)
i think you can read this in a few way. depending on who the reader sees the 1st person speaking too/with; friend, partner, self, which opens up extra dimensions. it has that great looky no touchy feel and in truth i feel a little guilty reading it because i'm always looking and thinking a similar thing
the dashes could be sw2apped for something of substance but i enjoyed it a lot. sorry for not getting to it till now
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There's a nice comic candor to the piece
. Some of the punctuation confused me but I liked it for what it is, I liked the directness.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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(10-18-2012, 09:08 AM)billy Wrote: i missed this one abu.
what did the dashes represent? ( i did use my own words of course)
i think you can read this in a few way. depending on who the reader sees the 1st person speaking too/with; friend, partner, self, which opens up extra dimensions. it has that great looky no touchy feel and in truth i feel a little guilty reading it because i'm always looking and thinking a similar thing
the dashes could be sw2apped for something of substance but i enjoyed it a lot. sorry for not getting to it till now
It is just a piece of fun, though I remember feeling slightly dirty, as there is a vague hint of the pervert. You have to imagine that you have come in mid-conversation, with the first speaker already on the defensive. The second speaker cannot be his partner, and in view of the implied age, is unlikely to be a parent. It could therefore be a sensible friend, m or f, or even he could be in some kind of institution, where they are trying to accustom him to ordinary life. Maybe a little more...or not...
(10-18-2012, 09:21 AM)addy Wrote: There's a nice comic candor to the piece . Some of the punctuation confused me but I liked it for what it is, I liked the directness.
It is a conversation. I see that the dashes are a bit muddling: they could just be a single long dash. Thank you for looking, Addy
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i do carry a vague odour de perv about me
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Yes most of us old pervs do enjoy observing a finely turned ankle, but exercise caution, Kippling issued a caveat of sorts about the fairer members of the species!
Oh what a wicket web we weave!
