04-04-2015, 11:09 AM
You do love me
I have proof
sometimes you do
not love me:
pen and paper
accusations
much white space.
I have proof
sometimes you do
not love me:
pen and paper
accusations
much white space.
Litmus
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04-04-2015, 11:09 AM
You do love me
I have proof sometimes you do not love me: pen and paper accusations much white space.
04-05-2015, 08:41 AM
(04-05-2015, 05:24 AM)A.H.Lavender Wrote:(04-04-2015, 11:09 AM)71degrees Wrote: You do love me Thanks, AHL…appreciate the look. Like the dash suggestion. Thanks for that. Trying to stay away from prose in the front half.
04-06-2015, 12:40 AM
(04-05-2015, 09:17 AM)A.H.Lavender Wrote:(04-05-2015, 08:41 AM)71degrees Wrote:(04-05-2015, 05:24 AM)A.H.Lavender Wrote: L3--the line break at do is awkward, and my editing altered it. Oh, it was intentional. Thanks for recognizing that. Not perfect and still open to suggestions, for sure.
04-06-2015, 03:42 AM
absolutely love this. Bugger you...not many people write about not being able to write and do such a great job.
04-06-2015, 11:44 AM
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