Grethel
#23
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Hi River,
thanks for returning (and for the introduction to 'My Last Duchess', new to me - not sure what you mean by 'in the room', as far as I could tell that would be a curtian, a chair (by inference), the adressee and a piece of bronze sculpture. Everything else is in the painting the speaker is describing/referring to. - and I enjoyed my first encounter with it.)
I'll change L4 forthwith.
Thanks again.




Best, Knot

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Revisions:

* etc, deleted.

L4, 'here' added, 'deep' deleted.  (As per River Smile )

L11, 'For' added.

L16, 'we might have stole that house to rubble' replaced.

L23, 'You' added.

L24, 'A' replaced 'The'.

L32, 'catch' replaced 'on'

L37/8, and everywhere the reek of meat,
          roasting to an awful sweetness." replaced.





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Messages In This Thread
Grethel - by Knot - 06-09-2021, 11:26 PM
RE: Grethel - by RiverNotch - 06-10-2021, 05:57 PM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-10-2021, 07:47 PM
RE: Grethel - by RiverNotch - 06-10-2021, 07:55 PM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-10-2021, 08:42 PM
RE: Grethel - by RiverNotch - 06-10-2021, 10:00 PM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-10-2021, 10:09 PM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-11-2021, 12:59 AM
RE: Grethel - by TranquillityBase - 06-11-2021, 01:41 PM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-11-2021, 07:20 PM
RE: Grethel - by TranquillityBase - 06-11-2021, 09:23 PM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-11-2021, 10:12 PM
RE: Grethel - by TranquillityBase - 06-12-2021, 02:26 AM
RE: Grethel - by Torkelburger - 06-11-2021, 11:02 PM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-12-2021, 12:13 AM
RE: Grethel - by Torkelburger - 06-12-2021, 01:06 AM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-12-2021, 01:55 AM
RE: Grethel - by dukealien - 06-12-2021, 05:31 AM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-12-2021, 08:13 PM
RE: Grethel - by RiverNotch - 06-12-2021, 09:52 PM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-13-2021, 01:05 AM
RE: Grethel - by RiverNotch - 06-13-2021, 04:54 PM
RE: Grethel - by Knot - 06-13-2021, 09:51 PM
RE: Grethel - by Erthona - 06-16-2021, 01:43 AM



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