Ozymandias
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Hi Dale,
I also have reservations about the title, but like that jaunty last line
and the 'old fashioned' (for want of a compliment) tone.
This has something of those early anonymous verses the one finds
in (particularly) large anthologies of Western poetry.

That double d, laid down, makes me stumble.
Any alternative to the two 'mys'?

Just a thought

De-composition

I lie upon this flowered bed
yet find no place to rest my head
although this matters not
for dead am I and soon will rot.


Best, Knot


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Messages In This Thread
Ozymandias - by Erthona - 05-09-2021, 11:15 AM
RE: Ozymandias - by TranquillityBase - 05-09-2021, 11:43 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Majestic Sun - 05-10-2021, 10:33 AM
RE: Ozymandias - by Erthona - 05-10-2021, 02:04 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Knot - 05-10-2021, 09:09 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Erthona - 05-13-2021, 06:37 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Knot - 05-13-2021, 07:30 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Erthona - 05-19-2021, 12:21 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by dukealien - 05-20-2021, 07:59 AM
RE: Ozymandias - by RiverNotch - 05-21-2021, 02:28 AM
RE: Ozymandias - by Erthona - 06-15-2021, 03:11 PM



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