Ozymandias
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(05-09-2021, 11:15 AM)Erthona Wrote:  Ozymandias

I laid down in my flower bed
but found nowhere to place my head.
Of course it mattered not,
for I was dead and soon would rot.
Last line seems too long?  Would a simple "For soon I would rot." work.  dead and rot seem redundant.  Really like the basic image, that important idea, where do I lay my head.
“All persons, living or dead, are entirely coincidental.”  Kurt Vonnegut
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Ozymandias - by Erthona - 05-09-2021, 11:15 AM
RE: Ozymandias - by TranquillityBase - 05-09-2021, 11:43 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Majestic Sun - 05-10-2021, 10:33 AM
RE: Ozymandias - by Erthona - 05-10-2021, 02:04 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Knot - 05-10-2021, 09:09 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Erthona - 05-13-2021, 06:37 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Knot - 05-13-2021, 07:30 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by Erthona - 05-19-2021, 12:21 PM
RE: Ozymandias - by dukealien - 05-20-2021, 07:59 AM
RE: Ozymandias - by RiverNotch - 05-21-2021, 02:28 AM
RE: Ozymandias - by Erthona - 06-15-2021, 03:11 PM



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